Slaughter by Angels

My first piece of writing that I was ever proud of. Based on The Book of Revelation in the Holy Bible, but take it as you will.

Angel's scream a sorrowed song, as all lives parish in white-hot flame.

The smoke is blinding to all, but gods. These bodies burn in shame.

Toxin's stifle broken air, to suffocate the race of man.

Inhale ash and exhale life.

Descend and rot unprotected.

 

Repentance shan't come to the wicked,

For the wicked can only spite.

Feel their wrath as they descend

In all of their terrible might.

 

The scripture breathes a shattered word, as fire rains from open skies.

Writ within, it tells a tale of destruction and demise.

Their tongues speak clear of pain and hate.

Wreaking havoc, they shall create

The answers sought in long conspire,

The truth about the gods desire.

 

Repentance shan't come to the wicked,

For the wicked can only spite.

Feel their wrath as they descend

In all of their terrible might.

Reviews

[Silent Pacer]

haha, I remember this one!!! you sang it enough... you should be proud!!! it penitrated my thick skull.... oh, and yes, this is a very amusing piece of work.... but you know that I think your writing is gold.. with a bit of silver cause it's shiny.

[Gary H]

Yeah, a good starting point and worth being proud of. Just for the flow I would consider taking out 'as all' from the first line, but I'm not meaning there is anything wrong with this. The repetitive lines seem almost lyric like and would fit in with a decent guitar riff. Actually thinking about this, you could have a major song here if you can sort out a middle and guitar solo. Seriously this would work.

Nicely done and is an interesting take on the Revelations.

[Angelic Darkness]

Good poem, and very visual. It was raw, intense.

[Blade & Blood (The ..]

I really like this. :) Your view on the Revelation is excellent. I absolutely love the Book of Revelation; it's my absolute favorite...

This poem of yours seems to be pretty accurate, in my opinion- but my goodness! Where are the Horsemen of the Apocalypse?! lol Just kidding! ^^ Phenomenal job, here. I loved it.

Ironically Yours, Blade and Blood

[Clouded in Hopeful Illu..]

Great detail. It really helps the audiance to understand where you are coming from. This is a great and powerful piece. I hope it moves all who reads it.

Thanks for sharing.

[Ice Queen of the Vampir..]

Wow, this is a powerful poem. Nice write!!!

Heather

[BelieveInCelia]

Very strong and powerful....

Welcome to Writers Cafe!

Celia