Slaughter by Angels

My first piece of writing that I was ever proud of. Based on The Book of Revelation in the Holy Bible, but take it as you will.

Angel's scream a sorrowed song, as all lives parish in white-hot flame.

The smoke is blinding to all, but gods. These bodies burn in shame.

Toxin's stifle broken air, to suffocate the race of man.

Inhale ash and exhale life.

Descend and rot unprotected.

 

Repentance shan't come to the wicked,

For the wicked can only spite.

Feel their wrath as they descend

In all of their terrible might.

 

The scripture breathes a shattered word, as fire rains from open skies.

Writ within, it tells a tale of destruction and demise.

Their tongues speak clear of pain and hate.

Wreaking havoc, they shall create

The answers sought in long conspire,

The truth about the gods desire.

 

Repentance shan't come to the wicked,

For the wicked can only spite.

Feel their wrath as they descend

In all of their terrible might.

Reviews

[Silent Pacer]

haha, I remember this one!!! you sang it enough... you should be proud!!! it penitrated my thick skull.... oh, and yes, this is a very amusing piece of work.... but you know that I think your writing is gold.. with a bit of silver cause it's shiny.

[PokemonFan#1]

Magnificent poem! Keep it up!

[Maddox]

Wow. I really liked reading this. The words and feeling behind it all. It's fantastic. Thanks for entering it in the contest. You deserve 1st place without a doubt. Absolutely amazing job!

[Sara]

I like it, it's creative how you cultivated a chapter in the Bible into something of your own, great job!

[Jaeda]

I love how you put Revelations in your own words. It's my personal favorite book of the Bible. Thanks for the submission.

[Jimmy Greenie]

Like it, particularly the two verses about the wicked. They really work well and have a nice flow. I hate to criticise, though, but the first verse is perhaps needs thinking about when it comes to rhyme. I'm not brilliant at rhyming myself, but it seems odd that all the lines rhyme but the last three. Sorry but...
Lovely poem though. or is it a song, looking at Silent Pacer's review. And she's right. You should be proud! This was brilliant.

[Lydia]

Beautifully written. Great job, I really enjoyed this.

[Chaos Stone]

the bible is always cool for that death and destruction stuffs
cool work, has the makings of a killer metal song, even though itd be christian

[Gabrielle]

Solemn, eerie, darkly deafening. All these traits and more describe this poem. I enjoyed the read, and look forward to reading more of your poetry.

[Drow]

This is amazing. The words seem to come off the page and smack you until you finish...in a good way

[Keir Mayja]

This is a remarkable piece. Such a adrk tale retold in your own words. i think its most peoples biggest fear to be part of tose whom fall into heel. You have captuerd that emotion so perfectly in this write.