Flux

Flux

A Poem by Ashira Macy

Banging on impermeable

Sound-proof walls

Of this hour glass,

Slowly filling to the brim

With skin scorching,

Suffocating sands of

If only

And shattered seashells of

Too late.

Roads take sharp turns,

The grit flowing backwards

In disordered fluctuation,

Tearing at the psych

In a torrent fit for

The asylum of

Could be

And hopeful chant of

I can…

© 2014 Ashira Macy


Author's Note

Ashira Macy
Came to me during work today for some reason.

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OK .. can not help but be curious as to your work place!? :) i think those little bold phrases .. such common self talk quotes is a great idea .. they bring your poem home to everyone .. and the images and feel of rasping over road rash in between is exquisitely tormenting .. after all that the relief of that beautiful little action potential .." I can..."
glad i stopped here this morning .. nice one!
E.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ashira Macy

10 Years Ago

I work at a pizza joint and I hate it. Lol! But yeah, this was just how I was feeling one day. Negat.. read more
Einstein Noodle

10 Years Ago

i worked at an Italian Restaurant in upstate NY many moons ago and learned to toss pizza dough .. i .. read more



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first 3 lines and last 4, absolutely brilliant.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Ashira Macy

10 Years Ago

Thank you sir!
Immerse this writing said to me ! Abstractions can be pulling, it seem that what surrounds you is subject to compliance of , You must , You shall and all other kinds of boundaries which limit what you can do. Well every day is a winding road sang that artist. Sometimes you get soft and smooth sometimes not. And things get difficult enough to challenge your stability yet secure within you say I am up for it.

"All I wanna do is have a little fun before I die"

Thankyou


Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ashira Macy

10 Years Ago

I loved this review, you had me singing in my mind throughout! You hit the nail on the head for sure.. read more
I simply love it.. specially the words in "italics"... Can so well relate to the state.. Thank U for sharing this.. Kuddos Gal :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ashira Macy

10 Years Ago

Thank you Frozen! I am happy you liked it!
I like this a lot actually, great job!

Posted 10 Years Ago


Ashira Macy

10 Years Ago

Thank you!
Great flow.
Got my grey cells working.
Well done.

Thank you
-Angad

Posted 10 Years Ago


Ashira Macy

10 Years Ago

Haha, glad to hear it got you thinking. Thank you for reading it!
Roads take sharp turn,

really nice to read this,, and you have written very well, nice job

Posted 10 Years Ago


Ashira Macy

10 Years Ago

Thanks so much.
Abstract and lucid. It was able to fire up the imagination mostly of redeeming kind. May be I need glasses soon but the font was little difficult to read. But I still enjoyed the write. Thanks for inviting Ashira.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ashira Macy

10 Years Ago

You may be right about the font, though I chose it for an artistic reason. Glad you enjoyed it thoug.. read more
I love the way it changes from if only and too late to I can.
Like a little self pep talk. Nice job. :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ashira Macy

10 Years Ago

Thank you Ana, I think it is what I needed. Glad you enjoyed it!

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Tags: flux, fluctuation, uncertainty, confusion, finding myself

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Ashira Macy
Ashira Macy

Martinez, CA



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