OK .. can not help but be curious as to your work place!? :) i think those little bold phrases .. such common self talk quotes is a great idea .. they bring your poem home to everyone .. and the images and feel of rasping over road rash in between is exquisitely tormenting .. after all that the relief of that beautiful little action potential .." I can..."
glad i stopped here this morning .. nice one!
E.
Posted 10 Years Ago
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10 Years Ago
I work at a pizza joint and I hate it. Lol! But yeah, this was just how I was feeling one day. Negat.. read moreI work at a pizza joint and I hate it. Lol! But yeah, this was just how I was feeling one day. Negativity warped suddenly into positivety. Glad you liked it!
10 Years Ago
i worked at an Italian Restaurant in upstate NY many moons ago and learned to toss pizza dough .. i .. read morei worked at an Italian Restaurant in upstate NY many moons ago and learned to toss pizza dough .. i use to amuse my children with my skill when they were little pepperonis :)
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Immerse this writing said to me ! Abstractions can be pulling, it seem that what surrounds you is subject to compliance of , You must , You shall and all other kinds of boundaries which limit what you can do. Well every day is a winding road sang that artist. Sometimes you get soft and smooth sometimes not. And things get difficult enough to challenge your stability yet secure within you say I am up for it.
"All I wanna do is have a little fun before I die"
Thankyou
Posted 10 Years Ago
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10 Years Ago
I loved this review, you had me singing in my mind throughout! You hit the nail on the head for sure.. read moreI loved this review, you had me singing in my mind throughout! You hit the nail on the head for sure. Glad you liked it!
Abstract and lucid. It was able to fire up the imagination mostly of redeeming kind. May be I need glasses soon but the font was little difficult to read. But I still enjoyed the write. Thanks for inviting Ashira.
Posted 10 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
10 Years Ago
You may be right about the font, though I chose it for an artistic reason. Glad you enjoyed it thoug.. read moreYou may be right about the font, though I chose it for an artistic reason. Glad you enjoyed it though my friend. =)
I am 24 years old and just getting back into writing after not using the skill for a few years, so I am a bit rusty. I am excited to share my new work as well as some old with this community and would.. more..