Flux

Banging on impermeable

Sound-proof walls

Of this hour glass,

Slowly filling to the brim

With skin scorching,

Suffocating sands of

If only

And shattered seashells of

Too late.

Roads take sharp turns,

The grit flowing backwards

In disordered fluctuation,

Tearing at the psych

In a torrent fit for

The asylum of

Could be

And hopeful chant of

I can…

Author's Note

Came to me during work today for some reason.

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

OK .. can not help but be curious as to your work place!? :) i think those little bold phrases .. such common self talk quotes is a great idea .. they bring your poem home to everyone .. and the images and feel of rasping over road rash in between is exquisitely tormenting .. after all that the relief of that beautiful little action potential .." I can..."
glad i stopped here this morning .. nice one!
E.

[Ashira Macy]

I work at a pizza joint and I hate it. Lol! But yeah, this was just how I was feeling one day. Negativity warped suddenly into positivety. Glad you liked it!

[Einstein Noodle]

i worked at an Italian Restaurant in upstate NY many moons ago and learned to toss pizza dough .. i use to amuse my children with my skill when they were little pepperonis :)
E.

[loverofpoetry7]

Very well written and I really like the way the "If only, Too Late, Could be and I can" made its way through this poem. This poem kind of took me on a journey. Was great to read.

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you, I am glad it brought you on a quest with it!

[Rita L. Sev]

Suffocating sands of
If only
And shattered seashells of
Too late...

Killer lines here, Ashira. I like the direction this piece took, deep truth to vibrant hope. :)

[Ashira Macy]

Thanks Rita! I find a lot of hope comes out of being in the dark for so long. Then any glimpse of light seems bright as the sun!

[John Ryan]

awesome as usual
keep it up

[Ashira Macy]

Thanks John!

[RAOrourke]

I like the way this turns from if only, too late...to could be, I can...great way to look a negative situation and how once we look we can turn it around, sometimes it is hard to see what can be.

[Ashira Macy]

Thanks so much, you are so right!

[Adam Whitworth]

oh, nice one! very imaginative. where there's life there's hope.

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you, I agree!

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

This for me, was a depiction of the decisions we make. It made me think
about life. The twists and turns were a thrill. It left me feeling that we hit many
forks in the road, but its never too late to get on the right path. I was inspired.

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you so much for your insightful review, you hit the nail right on the head. As long as we live there is still a chance to turn things around.

[willweb]

This one speaks to me in clear and uncluttered terms, even if the feeling of suffocation within that slowly falling and filling sand is evident. The ending shatters this gals and allows the reader to breathe again. Wonderful. I really enjoyed this today.

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you my friend, I am glad you were able to connect with this one!

[MomzillaNC]

Well penned. The visual paring down to the end adds impact to the lines.

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you so much, I am glad you liked it!

[MomzillaNC]

You're welcome.

[Ruth]

You have power in your words...damn, always so awesome! Smiling :)

[Ashira Macy]

Thanks so much Poppy.