Basket Case

She is eight ounces of crazy,

Two tablespoons of wrecked,

And twenty grams of chaos -

Served up on a platter

Of unprecedented basket case

Smothered in verbatim

Death by chocolate

And heavily seasoned in

Introspective rage

Fueled by long voracious nights

And sensory barraged days

Of life long subjugation.

Author's Note

A little late night rant.

Reviews

[C. Rose]

The first part reminded me of "10lbs of crazy in a 2lb bag" or however that expression goes.
While I like the line "death by chocolate" on its own - I don't see the correlation, unless what she is addicted to is food (I base that off of reading your responses to other reviews) but with limited food analogies that wouldn't be my first guess.

I think the ending confused me because it has some intense word choice, but at this point I haven't pinned down what you are being intense about.

It's funny. I was planning on this review being limited to "And heavily seasoned in
Introspective rage" is my favorite line, but once I started typing I started wondering about the overall meaning of the poem.

Then again, maybe I'm missing something
Well done as usual

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you C. Rose, I always enjoy your reviews, and I owe you a visit for sure, I promise I am coming around soon! I am not surprised that this one caused some confusion, in a way it was supposed to. I didn't call it Basket Case for no reason. This one actually has a lot of elements in it. The weights are in reference to measuring food. Death by chocolate was the most literal line in there, so it is good that you caught that. It is about food addiction, as well as trying to control it.

[Wórdsmíth]

Sometimes, the night takes ov`r the heart the way, it becomes itself the throne of "rants" to speak out the truth to the universe... with the mist fleshes of its beats. Well written!

[Ashira Macy]

Thanks so much!

[Briana O'Connor]

I love the way you associated insanity with food. It does not seem like a dish I would like to join you for dinner with, but it still makes for an interesting poem :P Thank you for sharing.

[Ashira Macy]

There is a lot of relation between food and insanity I think, especially where sugar is concerned, and particularly in the United States. Glad you liked it!

[Lyn Anderson]

I love this, the pic, the song, everything. No critique, in the faves!

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you my friend, so glad it appealed to you!

[Delmar Cooper]

Not having much to do with your poem or poetry in general, I liked the variation of units in your measurements: ounces, tablespoons , grams. Baxter Black, cowboy poet and large animal veterinarian, does a wonderful skit about measurements. He considers the english system old fashioned, but the metric system sounds vaguely communistic to him. His basic unit of volume is the cowfull. Personally, I like the old apothecary scale of measurement. I know that after having a dram or two I lose all my scruples.

[Marie]

When I read the first few lines of this poem,I thougt I knew this woman as she once was. WHen I readthe last of it, I saw her as she is now. Actually, she's one of my best friends, and I wrote a poem about her myself.

[Ashira Macy]

I would love to read it, what is it called?

[Marie]

I think it's called "To E.C."

[Ashira Macy]

I will take a look. =)

[Matching Socks]

Ok, I am DEFINITELY not having what she's having. I've already got too many mixed nuts in my head...

[Ashira Macy]

Haha that is probably best. =)

[kublakhan27]

This is a piece that tells the reader not what they want to hear but what they need to hear...I detected an undertone of an eating disorder in this one, among many other things...my own introspections are doomed to heavy seasonings of rage, and there are many elements of my past that I attempt to suppress for that reason, but I may never write if I didn't go back to them from time to time...I hope you are feeling better than this piece suggests my friend...it may be a rant, but you rant beautifully...my favourite poetry is of the most emotionally-charged variety, and this one certainly fits that criterion...well done Ashira :)

[Ashira Macy]

You hit the nail right on the head, good eye my friend, not everyone would spot that. There was a ton of emotion packed into this one, I had a rough day yesterday, so this just sort of poured out of me at the speed of light. I agree that if we couldn't dig into the past a bit our writing would not be much. I am on my way to feeling better, thank you so much for your concern. I am so happy you were able to decode this one and that you enjoyed it.

[kublakhan27]

You're most welcome my friend...I think we're on a similar wavelength these days...rough week...I do hope this reaches you in higher spirits :)

[Delmar Cooper]

So how's the diet working out so far?

[Ashira Macy]

Could be better. Lol.

[Terpsichore]

Better to be addicted to the glory of each new day. Still and all, the mind is a complex thing.

Got to admit to liking chocolate though

T

[Ashira Macy]

I agree, it is something we have to train ourselves to do.