Basket Case

She is eight ounces of crazy,

Two tablespoons of wrecked,

And twenty grams of chaos -

Served up on a platter

Of unprecedented basket case

Smothered in verbatim

Death by chocolate

And heavily seasoned in

Introspective rage

Fueled by long voracious nights

And sensory barraged days

Of life long subjugation.

Author's Note

A little late night rant.

Reviews

[C. Rose]

The first part reminded me of "10lbs of crazy in a 2lb bag" or however that expression goes.
While I like the line "death by chocolate" on its own - I don't see the correlation, unless what she is addicted to is food (I base that off of reading your responses to other reviews) but with limited food analogies that wouldn't be my first guess.

I think the ending confused me because it has some intense word choice, but at this point I haven't pinned down what you are being intense about.

It's funny. I was planning on this review being limited to "And heavily seasoned in
Introspective rage" is my favorite line, but once I started typing I started wondering about the overall meaning of the poem.

Then again, maybe I'm missing something
Well done as usual

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you C. Rose, I always enjoy your reviews, and I owe you a visit for sure, I promise I am coming around soon! I am not surprised that this one caused some confusion, in a way it was supposed to. I didn't call it Basket Case for no reason. This one actually has a lot of elements in it. The weights are in reference to measuring food. Death by chocolate was the most literal line in there, so it is good that you caught that. It is about food addiction, as well as trying to control it.

[Coyote Poetry]

This poem is amazing. You brought me in and you held me to the last words.
"She is eight ounces of crazy,
Two tablespoons of wrecked,
And twenty grams of chaos -"
Above lines are true poetry. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Saddam]

Good read.... as it is very well penned write.

[Chris]

quite a description for a person... sounds like a good person to share some coffee with.

[katnisscat]

With the first line, you had me hooked. I know a couple of people like this, but I guess that's what makes them interesting. Thatks for sharing. Because I suck at reviews I'm just going to say that I really like your writing.

[micky]

I think this is my new favourite food;) I love this piece Ashira you did a really wonderful job I really love how playful it is

[Ashira Macy]

Haha, glad you liked this one Micky!

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

Sensory overload! This was amazing work. This would make a great song.
My favorite thing is how punchy it is. Imagery flying at the reader from
every angle.

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you so much, I am glad it came off that way, it is certainly one of those subjects that feels like you are being punched in the gut.

[Shinigami of Chaos]

Looking at the title I thought of Green day and laughed when i heard the song after clicking your story link. Very nice

[Ashira Macy]

Thanks! I had to put it in there. =)

[Sami Khalil]

"Death by chocolate
And heavily seasoned in
Introspective rage"

[Ashira Macy]

Glad you liked those lines.

[Sami Khalil]

Yep. You are welcome...:)........

[Celestial Witch Child]

Aaaaah, so perfect! The more poems I read by you, the more and more I fall in love with your writing. And I love the Breakfast Club reference. So great. (:

[Ashira Macy]

Aw, thank you Aster, that is so sweet! I am so happy you are enjoying my writing!

[Kelly Scheppers]

Your muse has voiced itself with staggering articulation, Ashira!

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you Kelly!