Waterfalls and Wildflowers

Waterfalls and Wildflowers

A Poem by Ashira Macy

As we sailed away,

Tides melding bronze

With vivacious greens

And calm blue hues,

Spectacles overtook senses.

 

Water came crashing down

The rocky slopes

In a liquid avalanche

Of droplets painted ivory, prisms

Reserved for dreamers like you.

 

We passed through

The downward stream,

The past hitting us like bricks

And soaking us

Through to our memories.

 

You just laughed -

A little water never hurt anyone.

And I reached out

To the side of the cavern,

Plucking that golden wildflower

 

Tucking it behind your ear.

I smiled as you danced,

Splashing in the puddles,

And singing in the rain

Of childhood innocence.

© 2014 Ashira Macy


Author's Note

Ashira Macy
First poem I have written in a while, I have been having terrible writer's block as of late, so it may not be up to par. I tried to write this from a different point of view than my own, a father's perspective, so that is a new venture for me.

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A fascinating read indeed as if venturing into an oceanic painting while the artist's world is slowly brought to realistic life. You have captured the imagination of a child and preserved it in this poem literally whisking the reader away ever so gently into that present place. I envisioned waterfalls, fountains of youth, and colorful rain. One of my favorite reads in the past few days.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ashira Macy

10 Years Ago

Thank you so much for your glowing review, I really appreciate it! I am glad it brought you into the.. read more



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What a gorgeous poem! I really enjoyed this and I love to dream... you had me dreaming of rain and waterfalls... awesome!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ashira Macy

10 Years Ago

Thank you my friend, those are the best kind of dreams. =)
Whenever I come across any poem that even hints at the presence of water, I instinctively have to point out that I grew up literally on a shoreline (and still visit my Mom there on a regular basis) and that my Dad was a fisherman...when I got to your footnote and realized that this was coming from a father's perspective, well, I welled up a bit...we lost him two years ago so something like this is profoundly affecting, in a good way of course...mind you, I was affected right from the stanza one, and the poetry you gave to the wavering sea...I'd say you're very much back in business my friend...it usually takes me a lousy poem or two before writer's block is conquered, but you've killed it at the source with this one piece, which is unquestionably one of my favourites from your catalogue to date...love this one :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ashira Macy

10 Years Ago

How amazing it must have been to grow up on the shoreline! It must have been wonderful to get to see.. read more
kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

It must have had something to do with me becoming a writer ;) Always a pleasure my friend.
That's beautiful, I read a second time with my best lens of a father.
It's lovely. :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


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Ashira Macy

10 Years Ago

Thank you so much my friend!
Well, I think you did a fabulous job. I love the line "soaking us through to our memories"

Posted 10 Years Ago


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Ashira Macy

10 Years Ago

Thank you KL, that is good to hear.
I so love that ending, the whole poem is really sweet and tender in nature… it gave me a warm feeling deep within.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ashira Macy

10 Years Ago

Thanks so much my friend, so glad you liked it!
why do you say it is not up to par?
this is so serene....i am a dreamer....i sing in the rain of my childhood memories all the time...

wishing the water could flow backwards.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ashira Macy

10 Years Ago

I thought it might be because I had been out of the game for a few days, but everyone's response has.. read more
It was an okay poem. Simply written. I like your second stanza the most. I thought your description there was well done. Write on!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ashira Macy

10 Years Ago

Thank you my friend, I shall!
Simple and as sweet as the smile on a child's face.. brought one on mine too :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


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Ashira Macy

10 Years Ago

Thanks so much Frozen!
wow. it is AMAZING! really liked it. great job

Posted 10 Years Ago


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Ashira Macy

10 Years Ago

Thank you my friend, I am so happy you enjoyed it!
Shapirta

10 Years Ago

your welcome! =)
"and soaking us through to our memories" I loved that. Your entire poem is free flowing and feels so peaceful and happy. How wonderul those memories can be. I really enjoyed this today.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ashira Macy

10 Years Ago

Thank you Will, that is reassuring for sure. So glad you liked it.

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Ashira Macy
Ashira Macy

Martinez, CA



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