First poem I have written in a while, I have been having terrible writer's block as of late, so it may not be up to par. I tried to write this from a different point of view than my own, a father's perspective, so that is a new venture for me.
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A fascinating read indeed as if venturing into an oceanic painting while the artist's world is slowly brought to realistic life. You have captured the imagination of a child and preserved it in this poem literally whisking the reader away ever so gently into that present place. I envisioned waterfalls, fountains of youth, and colorful rain. One of my favorite reads in the past few days.
Posted 10 Years Ago
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10 Years Ago
Thank you so much for your glowing review, I really appreciate it! I am glad it brought you into the.. read moreThank you so much for your glowing review, I really appreciate it! I am glad it brought you into the scene, I always love when people are able to envision it as I do.
Whenever I come across any poem that even hints at the presence of water, I instinctively have to point out that I grew up literally on a shoreline (and still visit my Mom there on a regular basis) and that my Dad was a fisherman...when I got to your footnote and realized that this was coming from a father's perspective, well, I welled up a bit...we lost him two years ago so something like this is profoundly affecting, in a good way of course...mind you, I was affected right from the stanza one, and the poetry you gave to the wavering sea...I'd say you're very much back in business my friend...it usually takes me a lousy poem or two before writer's block is conquered, but you've killed it at the source with this one piece, which is unquestionably one of my favourites from your catalogue to date...love this one :)
Posted 10 Years Ago
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10 Years Ago
How amazing it must have been to grow up on the shoreline! It must have been wonderful to get to see.. read moreHow amazing it must have been to grow up on the shoreline! It must have been wonderful to get to see the sun rise and set on the water. Not to mention fishing is just so much fun, and calming. I am so sorry to hear about your father, losing a parent is never easy, but especially hard when you are younger. I am glad you enjoyed it though, and that it read well. Thank you my friend.
10 Years Ago
It must have had something to do with me becoming a writer ;) Always a pleasure my friend.
why do you say it is not up to par?
this is so serene....i am a dreamer....i sing in the rain of my childhood memories all the time...
wishing the water could flow backwards.
Posted 10 Years Ago
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10 Years Ago
I thought it might be because I had been out of the game for a few days, but everyone's response has.. read moreI thought it might be because I had been out of the game for a few days, but everyone's response has been so reassuring. Thank you Jacob. I am a dreamer as well, and I know exactly what you mean.
"and soaking us through to our memories" I loved that. Your entire poem is free flowing and feels so peaceful and happy. How wonderul those memories can be. I really enjoyed this today.
Posted 10 Years Ago
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10 Years Ago
Thank you Will, that is reassuring for sure. So glad you liked it.
I am 24 years old and just getting back into writing after not using the skill for a few years, so I am a bit rusty. I am excited to share my new work as well as some old with this community and would.. more..