Waterfalls and Wildflowers

As we sailed away,

Tides melding bronze

With vivacious greens

And calm blue hues,

Spectacles overtook senses.

 

Water came crashing down

The rocky slopes

In a liquid avalanche

Of droplets painted ivory, prisms

Reserved for dreamers like you.

 

We passed through

The downward stream,

The past hitting us like bricks

And soaking us

Through to our memories.

 

You just laughed -

A little water never hurt anyone.

And I reached out

To the side of the cavern,

Plucking that golden wildflower

 

Tucking it behind your ear.

I smiled as you danced,

Splashing in the puddles,

And singing in the rain

Of childhood innocence.

Author's Note

First poem I have written in a while, I have been having terrible writer's block as of late, so it may not be up to par. I tried to write this from a different point of view than my own, a father's perspective, so that is a new venture for me.

Reviews

[SurindrasFawn]

A fascinating read indeed as if venturing into an oceanic painting while the artist's world is slowly brought to realistic life. You have captured the imagination of a child and preserved it in this poem literally whisking the reader away ever so gently into that present place. I envisioned waterfalls, fountains of youth, and colorful rain. One of my favorite reads in the past few days.

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you so much for your glowing review, I really appreciate it! I am glad it brought you into the scene, I always love when people are able to envision it as I do.

[Sami Khalil]

I have enjoyed your liquid and flowery imagery. I'm splashing in its beauty. Bravo.......................

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you Sami!

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)...............

[Frontier]

I like the second stanza, vivid imagery without giving away too much

[Ashira Macy]

Thanks so much, glad you enjoyed it!

[Arrinae]

I think you did a wonderful job. It's a beautiful poem, and I love the story it tells. Thank you for sharing.

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you so much my friend!

[Hasan Hersi]

Theres alot of colour which adds to the imagery you created, the last line in your third stanza makes me think that your describing the river of time or something lool, i enjoyed it very much.

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you Hasan, I am happy you liked it.

[Mayank]

very beautiful piece, even with a writer's block you pulled it off very well.

[Ashira Macy]

Thanks so much! Gotta break through the blockade somehow right?

[Rache David]

i feel nostalgic with your poem.. it conjures up some memories from the past that has been buried deep down the mind ... that is in danger of losing.. It's so simple yet refreshing poem... It's like I want to go back in times ... when I was a child.. :-)
That kind of feeling.. :-)

[Ashira Macy]

Thanks Rachel, I am glad it evoked such thoughts in you, as that is what I was feeling as I wrote it. =)

[Lyan]

Well done! it feels really calming and innocent.

[Ashira Macy]

Thanks Lyana!

[Igarin]

I like it, somewhat innocent yet passionate...

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you sir!

[yuki]

very well done I really like this :)

[Ashira Macy]

Thanks Yuki!

[hardeep sabharwal]

This is really beautiful

and title is awesome, well done Ashira

[Ashira Macy]

Thanks so much my friend!