First poem I have written in a while, I have been having terrible writer's block as of late, so it may not be up to par. I tried to write this from a different point of view than my own, a father's perspective, so that is a new venture for me.
My Review
Would you like to review this Poem? Login | Register
A fascinating read indeed as if venturing into an oceanic painting while the artist's world is slowly brought to realistic life. You have captured the imagination of a child and preserved it in this poem literally whisking the reader away ever so gently into that present place. I envisioned waterfalls, fountains of youth, and colorful rain. One of my favorite reads in the past few days.
Posted 10 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
10 Years Ago
Thank you so much for your glowing review, I really appreciate it! I am glad it brought you into the.. read moreThank you so much for your glowing review, I really appreciate it! I am glad it brought you into the scene, I always love when people are able to envision it as I do.
And this managed to escape my poetical radar I apologize. Plus I just saw some prose which needs reading your prose is always good, damn prose, enough of that..... Ok I got pulled in by this writing. The way you reached in and managed to create a scene from days gone by was so easy to imagine for a moment I had my own story going on. The playfullness and aspects of life were no worries seemingly about. All this while you are telling us that we are indeed going on a journey on a downward stream. And the magical description at the beggining it felt as if painted by words.
Great stuff.
Thankyou
Posted 10 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
10 Years Ago
You are too kind Rene, I am so happy you enjoy my prose, as well as this piece. Thank you for taking.. read moreYou are too kind Rene, I am so happy you enjoy my prose, as well as this piece. Thank you for taking the time to read and review. It is always wonderful hearing your opinion.
I think you captured the view point perfectly. It was as if looking down at a toddler watching her experience life for the first time. Very graceful tale you have spun. Thank you for sharing.
A soft melodic touch`s found in this write. The ending of the piece`s brought the reader`s love to you in disguise of their reviews. I enjoyed the write since starting to a beautiful end. Nice imagery.
Yea there will be waterfalls in life that soak us but when we pass through them that's where we find them wildflowers:) Well that's just my little interp-- awesome imagery anyway it moves you:)
Posted 10 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
10 Years Ago
Thank you for your lovely interpretation Tony, I am glad you enjoyed it.
My writer's block usually takes a while for me to shake off. It's like a load of laundry that you know you have to do, and yet until it gets done, it just sits there and stares at you! I love the feel of this, the title you gave it, and the ambiance of it. Your writing is always top-notch, Ashira!
Posted 10 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
10 Years Ago
Haha, I know exactly what you mean! And thank you, you are so sweet!
I am 24 years old and just getting back into writing after not using the skill for a few years, so I am a bit rusty. I am excited to share my new work as well as some old with this community and would.. more..