Hotel Desolation

Another "Devil's Highway" inspired piece.

Lost and forgotten,

Forsaken… condemned.

 

Relentless rays of

Ultraviolet fate

Trickle down in a beat

Only water should dance to.

 

That playful liquid is long gone.

 

For Desolation drinks bone dry

Not the air alone,

But all that linger.

 

Devil’s Highway awaits

With open arms and bated breath.

 

Come on in boys,

Chase that American dream!

 

It is just…

Around…

 

 

The…

 

 

 

………………………………..

Author's Note

Let me know what you think. This was super experimental. Something different to try.

Reviews

[NoelHC]

No idea why, but this took me on a little trip, exploring ghost towns, once booming little centres of commerce, now abandoned, doors askew on hinges, broken windows, weeds growing in the middle of the streets, me on a motorcycle, revisiting a past that maybe never really existed.
Well done.

[Ashira Macy]

Thanks Noel, I am so glad it took you on that journey. Ghost towns certainly can be desolate.

[Igarin]

The idea of a lonely woman in desperate search for companionship seeks where she shouldn't...She is fully aware that she might fall down a pit of regret and sorrow...

[Ashira Macy]

Interesting take on this one, thanks Igarin.

[Baby Ricochet]

I stayed in that place. It was a Knights Inn in Georgia, but it was only 29 bucks for two people.

[Ashira Macy]

Haha, yikes. Hope you stayed hydrated.

[Fenix Flight]

I like how it kind of just fades and drops at the end. Really cool. This gives such a great image in my head. oh a rundown place cast away abandoned. Well done

[Ashira Macy]

Thanks Fenix, I am glad this one spoke to you.

[Einstein Noodle]

Great ending!! the devils highway is paved with many a poor boy .. and girl .. in America the freedoms we exercise have created a dream narrative that is laced with greed, avarice, lust, enslavement, abuse and murder ... whew! haters say that the USA is the great satan .. so they attack Americans .. but i believe that old devil is hiden ... and his highway and gates are wide and easy ... i have read in the Bible on the other hand that the road to heaven is narrow, difficult to travel, and the gates like the eye of the needle ... did you know that the gates into Jerusalem were built so that traders had to force their camels to crawl through them (a defense from marauders) that's where the phrase from the bible that says its easier for a camel to pass through the eye of the needle than a rich man to enter the gates of heaven ... your poem also makes me think of bad boy bikers tearing up the highway :) so nice job .. your poem for me is inspiring and i enjoyed the ride

E.

[Ashira Macy]

Wow, I did not know that about Jerusalem, but that is a very interesting point. Thank you for your kind review, I am so glad you enjoyed it. =D

[anne]

so strong.....conveyed emotions too well... :))

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you Anne.

[Avinash]

Yes the american dream, a land of promise no longer holds the clout once it had but in any nation's life cycles come and go. But the foundation on which this nation was built once its people realize it will rise again. I only wish and pray for the land of promises.

[Ashira Macy]

Thanks so much Avinash, I hope you are right.

[Ruth]

I love this...there is power here and yet a subtle feel of warning, beautifully done love x

[Ashira Macy]

Thanks Poppy, glad you liked it!

[Rene Salinas]

Is funny how knowledge works sometimes. I was just attempting to write a tribute to "Thots" by Otep Shamaya (should be thoughts) and the theme is pretty similar to this. I enjoyed the unfolding but somehow and I am not good at crtisicm would have hoped for anger, desolation and misery but especially senslessness expressed in angry words. As it is I was left with defiant words even satirical go on have a go see where it may take you ...... Maybe is just a temperament quality .

Good experiment.

Thankyou

[Ashira Macy]

I think you it the nail on the head. Thank you so much for your kind review my friend.

[Mayank]

'American Dream' now you have got my attention, please tell me that you love Beat generation authors! I love the metaphor and the imagery of driving on the highway with lost thoughts like a wanderer.

[Ashira Macy]

I actually don't know what Beat generation is. Glad you enjoyed it though. =)