Hotel Desolation

Another "Devil's Highway" inspired piece.

Lost and forgotten,

Forsaken… condemned.

 

Relentless rays of

Ultraviolet fate

Trickle down in a beat

Only water should dance to.

 

That playful liquid is long gone.

 

For Desolation drinks bone dry

Not the air alone,

But all that linger.

 

Devil’s Highway awaits

With open arms and bated breath.

 

Come on in boys,

Chase that American dream!

 

It is just…

Around…

 

 

The…

 

 

 

………………………………..

Author's Note

Let me know what you think. This was super experimental. Something different to try.

Reviews

[NoelHC]

No idea why, but this took me on a little trip, exploring ghost towns, once booming little centres of commerce, now abandoned, doors askew on hinges, broken windows, weeds growing in the middle of the streets, me on a motorcycle, revisiting a past that maybe never really existed.
Well done.

[Ashira Macy]

Thanks Noel, I am so glad it took you on that journey. Ghost towns certainly can be desolate.

[Briana O'Connor]

I love this. I'm not awake enough to think of the words I want to say, but I can assure you this is awesome :D

[Ashira Macy]

Haha I know how that is. Thank you dear!

[Frozen Eyes]

Devil’s Highway awaits
With open arms and bated breath.

Loved these lines.. and your experiment is a super success.. reading it more than thrice now..

[Ashira Macy]

Wow, thank you Frozen, I am glad you liked it!

[Sindu]

That drew a picture of a disfigured skeleton on a buildings left behind as an after thought of life before, figures dressed in cloaks fashionably call you with a hypnotic gaze and skeleton fingers. Neat write!

[Ashira Macy]

What a fascinating take, I love it! So glad you enjoyed this!

[Swetha]

i like your descriptions..."playful liquid" "ultraviolet fate"

[Ashira Macy]

Thanks so much Swetha!

[Eve Ola]

i found it very playful "Only water should dance to." Well done Ashira :)

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you dear!

[Pushkar Prabhat]

a successful experiment!
i love everything about this one: the subject, the treatment, presentation, ending!
amazing write!
i loved it!
:)

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you so much Pushkar, I am glad it read well for you!

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoyed the poem. You led the reader to the very good ending. You gave enough to create visions and possibilities. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you so much Coyote, I am glad you liked it.

[Ntandoyenkosi Ngcobo]

You never cease to amaze me!...··

[Ashira Macy]

Thanks so much my friend!

[John Ryan]

your imagery is very striking!

your talent is very dense and rich.

truly the mark of a great writer

[Ashira Macy]

Thanks so much John.