Puzzle Piece Poker

He’s Brother Bluff

She’s Lady Luck

And I’m bit of both.

 

Still, we’ll sit for hours

Four flipped up,

Three turned down,

Betting puzzle pieces

And relishing in rose tea.

 

Strained faces struggle…

Resolved, remain relaxed.

Though a fiery faced flush

Might make one motion

In piercing, petulant pride;

 

The real royal gem

Is insight inside and

Outward, observing them.

Author's Note

I have been having a bit of writers block. Comments? Suggestions?

Reviews

[AprilRN1210]

Holy alliteration!!! you have me over here just giggling... wahooooo!!! you KNEW I would like this one ma'am.. I also LOVE poker, so two of my favorite things.. it was playful and yet, slightly meaningful... The last stanza is my favorite... One suggestion, I would leave the "a" out of the first line.. nicely done ma'am.. I enjoyed:)

[Ashira Macy]

Haha, I had a feeling this might be your cup of tea. Poker is definitely a ton of fun. And you are right, that "a" definitely doesn't belong there. Thank you so much April!

[Sami Khalil]

A great analogy with life. Bravo..................

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you kindly Sami!

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)....................

[Matching Socks]

Poker is so much like life.
Holding on to our cards, bluffing, not showing our hands.
I wish more being would just lay it out.
I like this so much.

[Ashira Macy]

Thanks Ana, and it is so true.

[Nusquam Esse]

I enjoyed this one quite a bit; surprisingly clever (but then and again, I suppose games of 'chance' take a bit of clever play.) I like how this can be taken as an allegory of sorts, since I am a sucker for those sorts of writes; abstract and existential. But even if it was only about a game of cards, it still sums up that feeling perfectly; of trying to outdo your competition. Well... except I would be playing with hard liquor and not rose tea. Not because I dislike tea by any means, but because I have a strong resilience to alcohol (huzzah for being a large Irishman), and it skews things in my favour.

[Ashira Macy]

You hit the nail right on the head my friend, it does have a deeper meaning than what is on the surface. It is not a typical write for me, I usually describe things at face value, but I figured I would take a swing at it. So glad you found it enjoyable. As for the liquor, it depends on my mood and who I am playing with. =)

[Frieda P]

Intriguing sentiments played within the game of life, for writer's block you hit a high note of aces with this....

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you so much my dear friend!

[Akshay]

I like the topic of choice, it's one of a kind. Over the past week, I've become a "fan" of yours and this piece only makes me adore your writing even more.
And also, your writers block pieces are better than my best pieces.
Thanks for sharing.

[Ashira Macy]

Aw, thank you Ashkay you are so sweet, I appreciate you kind words, and I am so glad you liked this.

[Ashira Macy]

Also, your work is fantastic, never sell yourself short! =)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

just abstract enough...the analogy of life to poker...do we bluff with our feelings, do we show our hand...how much do we bet on fate---love could be that card up our sleeve.

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you Jacob!

[Rocans]

I like this. Your alliterations were nice. It was okay.

[Ashira Macy]

Thanks Rocans!

[micky]

Great piece, interesting choice of topic :)

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you Micky!

[Cory Barrett]

i think its interesting, it leaves me wanting more... but as i have come to love about poetry we as the author can dictate the final feeling of the reader. I actually wrote a piece that 85 percent of the reviews on it where negative, and the i realized i knew how to make people really dislike something i write. I know this is usually not the intent, and i know may be rambling on, but you have some how captured a moment or morning in time and have done it well.

[Ashira Macy]

I can't imagine any of your pieces getting that many negative responses, but if that was your intention then more power to you! Glad it left you wanting more though. =)

[Mary Bosworth]

Well Done and thank you for sharing it with us.

[Ashira Macy]

Thanks Mary.