Humpback

You twosome

Teasing jesters,

Diving down below.

Flowing, playing, dancing

How you love

Each other so.

 

Great curved backs

Emerge from the sea

With such clear pride;

Shooting water

Through the air,

Gravity aside.

 

Wading along

The rock-clothed shore

Forever in a pair

Singing in tandem

Harmonies that

Show how much you care.

Author's Note

Comments? Suggestions?

Reviews

[Nusquam Esse]

This piece definitely got me on a personal level... I love the way you depict the whales, in their awe-inspiring majesty... not just for their sheer might and size, but also in their connection with each other. Not really sure what to say, on a free-verse such as this, beyond that this moved me. Thanks for sharing.

[Ashira Macy]

Thanks for reviewing Esse, I am glad it moved you. They really were playing together, right alongside our boat, so it was a spectacular sight to behold.

[Frieda P]

Such an elegantly descriptive poem, your words took on movement, and the imagery was beyond fantastic, great one Ashira.

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you so much darling! =)

[Frieda P]

Oh cool, you added whale sounds, was my pleasure. :)

[Lyn Anderson]

This is a really nice piece. A wonderful description of one of nature's most gracious creatures. I would only suggest adding a beautiful image and a spot of whale song to the piece.

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you for your suggestions my friend, I actually have no idea how to do that. Every time I try to add a video or picture it just shows the link. I have been meaning to ask people how they add theirs.

[Lyn Anderson]

Okay, so on the picture, browse and open to add. On the music, the easiest way is to put it in the author's note by finding one on Youtube and copying the embed code and cutting and pasting the embed code in. There are other things, putting on autoplay, etc., but this is a basic simple way.

[The Twin Arenas]

better without pictures. unless you drew 'em. my two cents. peanut gallery.

[Ashira Macy]

Thanks so much, I had been trying to use just normal links.

[Beccy]

Fascinating how a poet can be inspired to put pen to paper by almost anything. No forces of gravity hold this back, it's quite lovely.

Beccy.

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you Beccy, I often take inspiration from the nature that I see, we live in an amazing world.

[The Twin Arenas]

Yeah, this is good. I guess it's nice to see or read about whales caring about each other, as opposed to reading about how much we're supposed to care about whales.

I care about whales, though.

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you Waconda, I do too. Always have, I believe I did a report on them in the fourth grade. =)

[The Twin Arenas]

who didn't.

[Matching Socks]

What a beautiful piece you've crafted Ashira.
Lovers frolicking, free, tender, passionate.
Be they whale or human makes no difference to me.
This poem is a beauty!

[Ashira Macy]

Thanks so much Ana, I am so happy you liked it!

[Tom]

Whales are indeed impressive creatures and regrettably have been cruelly hunted by mankind down through the centuries, so it's pleasing to read a poem praising their magnificence!

A fine homily indeed in poetic form!

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you Tom, and you are too right. Human beings can be so cruel.

[Chris McGrath]

You have great command of rhythm, rhyme and meter! The first two stanzas made me think you were describing a pair of frolicking whales. The last stanza made it clear that the human pair on the rock-frocked shore were feeling the inspiration of perhaps only thoughts and dreams of the freedom of mated whales.

I love the way your poem makes me feel rocked as I read it and enlightened as I consider its purpose! You have a gift!

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you kindly Chris, I am so glad you found so much meaning in this one. =D

[Wandering Minstrel]

This is very unique and inspiring..The whole set up and the word choices reads very beautifully

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you, so happy you enjoyed it!

[Marie]

This is fine just as it is. I love the idea of humpback whales dancing together in the ocean.

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you Marie, it was quite a site to behold.