Sea Serpent

Those frozen ridges

Jut out of the swell

Like the spine of a

Great sapphire serpent

Curious of our minute vessel.

 

Light reflects off of fractals

Sending those shades of

Brilliant cerulean and frosted ivory

Into our stricken eyes

So we marvel in wonder.

 

Come, great dragon of the north!

Let us grasp you in all your glory!

 

Nay, you are too proud

So we see your rigid crest

And nothing more.

Still you are only perceived

As perfection incarnate.

Author's Note

Comments? Suggestions?

Reviews

[Rocans]

Expertly penned. Your poetic language enraptures me. I like the fantastical spin on your work. "Light reflects off of fractals Sending those shades of Brilliant cerulean and frosted ivory Into our stricken eyes
we marvel in wonder. Those were the best lines for me! You are definitely a good find. Will definitely check out more of your works

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you for your sweet review Rocans, I am so happy you enjoyed it!

[Wórdsmíth]

Very vivid imagery you`ve swagged up.. with holding the warmed breath of yous to your fluffy heart. Liked the functioning of words; blue words (defining--sapphire eyes); Italic style (Giving rhythm to sea--serpents .. creeping into the fathoms of a wild wide indigo ocean. Your insights`re very deep and, of course, as adorable as you onself are. Enjoyed the write. Keep it up the excellent performance.

[Roger Turgeon]

I shall never slow my boat again as to not leave a wake

[Ashira Macy]

Haha, thank you for reading Roger.

[Blogger]

I think its great. No suggestions here. I like how this write seems to will be onto a vessel which can examine a huge, solitary creature.

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you my friend, this was Alaska inspired. =D

[Blogger]

i just edited my comment....sorry.

[Ashira Macy]

Why, what was wrong with it?

[Marie]

THis makes me think of a real dragon with sapphire scales...like frozen waves getting ready to crash...

[Ashira Macy]

It made me think of one too. Thank you Marie.

[Sophy Freebirds]

Alaskan fever still on?? The vivid imagery here is stunning.. the way you describe the frozen ridges as serpents gave my mind a punch.. you floored me with this one. Your words do have a quality of the pre raphaelites. It is a trait i really admire in poets.. The enchanting scene of such exotic place filled me with awe.. :) well done girl.xoxo

~Sophy

[Ashira Macy]

Aw thank you Sophy, you are so sweet, that is such a wonderful compliment. I will probably be on an Alaska kick for a while. It is ironic really, I live in California which is also a beautiful state, but it hasn't inspired any nature poetry other than Aquae Magnificum. Go figure. Haha.

[Sophy Freebirds]

Hah. We usually don't appreciate the daily scenic beauty. We take it for granted.. was a pleasure sweety :)

[MomzillaNC]

To me, this poem feels like standing on the wind swept deck of ship in the roiling sea…

[Ashira Macy]

I am glad it felt that way, as that it exactly what inspired me.

[MomzillaNC]

Cool! Thanks for sharing the poem.

[Sami Khalil]

"fractals
Sending those shades of
Brilliant cerulean and frosted ivory
Into our stricken eyes
So we marvel in wonder."

A lot of sea or land serpents roaming around. Some humans like to be that way too. Excellent...:)......................

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you so much Sami, I am happy you enjoyed it!

[Sami Khalil]

Yep. You are welcome...:)...................

[realmwriter]

Let us swim the sea side by side, let us marvel, let us wonder
Let us dance the sands, hand in hand, let us watch, let us roam
Let us fly through mist of night, let our fire burn as bright
Let the light play the night, let the sea, just be the sea

The Serpent swim, the crest and fall, let the ocean envelope all
Magnificent Dragon of the sky, let it bring us the star in our eye
Fantastic Serpent below, let it bring us a fire to grow
Great beast of sea and sky, let us swim, let us fly
Through oceans tide, Over tallest peak, Oh Great Serpents, hear us speak. By realmwriter 2014

Your pieces continue to inspire me, I thank you for that. Your piece is ethereal in way of which I can seldom capture in my own. I envy your ability to capture such fleeting moments of tenderness and joy and strength and wisdom, in a way that lets the reader develop a grand, picturesque feeling of enlightenment. Wonderfully done and masterfully penned.

[Ashira Macy]

It makes me so happy when others are inspired by my work, and you always write such wonderful compliments to it! I just write what I see or feel. If I try to force it the words turn out cruddy and robotic. Thank you for your kind review my friend!

[realmwriter]

That's how I write, just what I feel or see. I can't force it because it won't work if I do. A composition, to me, is much better if it just flows. Any changes that might need to be made after, can be made and still retain that since of flow that I believe any piece needs. Otherwise a robot may as well have written it, and we all know they can't write.

[Ashira Macy]

Maybe in zeros and ones, but those are no fun to read. =P

[realmwriter]

Exactly, no fun at all