Playing Dumb

I know what you're up to...

I know what you are up to,

Your words all laced

In clumsy innuendo

And deviant suggestion.

 

I know what you are thinking

With your roving eyes

And lingering touches

Tracing patterns on my ivory skin.

 

I know what you want,

What you crave.

Your desires stirred up

In mindful flirtation.

 

But it’s fun to watch you squirm.

I’d rather be the vixen to your hound dog,

So I’ll just keep playing dumb

And you’ll just keep on chasing.

Author's Note

Comments? Suggestions?

Reviews

[kublakhan27]

'I’d rather be the vixen to your hound dog'...yep, I have lots of hound dog experience...and shy guys don't make good hound dogs haha I do specialize in clumsy innuendos though...I'm just glad I can write and be able to formulate my thoughts in ways I can't do in real life...well done my friend :)

[Ashira Macy]

Haha, be glad you can write, it is not a skill that many can boast these days. I certainly doubt this hound dog could write anywhere near as eloquently as you. Thank you for reading. =D

[kublakhan27]

Always a pleasure Ashira :)

[JJHII]

So I’ll just keep playing dumb
And you’ll just keep on chasing.

Like everyone so far I enjoyed this poem of yours as well. I love this ending because at first I thought to suggest " and let you just keep on chasing" But with the way you wrote it is better because I like the fact that you already predicted and know what they will do. Very enjoyable read !

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you so much my friend, I am happy you liked it!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

This is a fiesty and partly humerous piece. It emits two tones, indignation and distain and at the same time their relish for power and the satisfaction of knowing you are in control. A nice read.

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you so much my friend, for reading and reviewing. You have a very good eye for detail it would seem.

[Pól]

Me thinks thou doth protest too much.

[Ashira Macy]

Haha, nah, gotta keep people guessing.

[Pól]

Lol.................

[Blogger]

This is unique, yet very identifiable. And fun to read.

[Ashira Macy]

Thanks man!

[Briana O'Connor]

I know what you are up to,
Your words all laced
In clumsy innuendo
And deviant suggestion.----
What a great way to draw the reader in. The first line expresses there's a plot in the making and it urges one to move forward to see just what trouble lies ahead. The next three lines are elegantly entwined implying the "suspect" is sneaky and one to be watched and taken with a grain of salt. This is a very cleverly written first stanza.

I know what you are thinking
With your roving eyes
And lingering touches
Tracing patterns on my ivory skin.-----
The way you continue like the first verse by adding a simple twist is ingenious. It adds mystery to the plot which is thickening as you explore the features of the "suspect" in the next three lines.

I know what you want,
What you crave.
Your desires stirred up
In mindful flirtation.-----
The way you've moved from building on character to the moment where all is to be revealed is skin prickling bliss. I especially love the term "mindful flirtation"

But it’s fun to watch you squirm.
I’d rather be the vixen to your hound dog,
So I’ll just keep playing dumb
And you’ll just keep on chasing.----
The sudden change in format sparks my attention. Alas the "suspect" is getting beat at his own game. The way you describe the animalistic traits that humans possess in certain circumstances such as the one this poem portrays is vivid and magnificent. Such beauty lies in the way you went from one suspenseful stanza to the next. Thank you for sharing and keep up the good work.

[Ashira Macy]

Wow Briana, thank you for breaking this one apart piece by piece, I don't think anyone has every done that for me before. I am so happy you found this one a joy to read, it was certainly a lot of fun to write. =)

[Mary Bosworth]

This is simply awesome and a great message too. I simply adored this piece

[Ashira Macy]

Thanks Mary.

[Blake Fodor]

this is such a deep write ...enjoyed reading it very much .

[Ashira Macy]

Thanks Blake.

[realmwriter]

This a rather enjoyable piece. You play coy as if he is chasing a toy. You're content to let him and he is content to continue. Very well done and the color adds a certain since playfulness, as if the chase is but a game waiting to see who wins.

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you so much, I am happy you enjoyed it! =)

[realmwriter]

You're most welcome.