We're Not in Oz Anymore

3 Senryu poem

Clutch me fervently

Ere the galaxy’s burden

Crushes me anew.

 

As the squall bursts out

Traction loses discipline

Footing trips on air.

 

Oz gone forever

No Kansas to click home, so

Bunker down and pray.

Author's Note

I am aware this one is a little strange. Let me know what you think.

Reviews

[Matching Socks]

The last lines really struck me. It's like being caught between a rock and a hard place.
Can't click your heels to go home, yet your current location is gone... You can't stay.
I wonder if people living in war torn countries feel displaced, yes. I imagine they do, stupid question.

[Ashira Macy]

You are spot on. Not much you can do when the world around you is crumbling away.

[Confuser]

It could be anything tragic in life; thought you did a great job. It always seems like something is so, so terribly awful: Clutch me Feverently...Footing trips on air. Bunker down and pray. Where do we go; what do we do when we feel so alone. Very nice work. Thank you Ashira Macy!

[Frieda P]

Quirky and unique, definitely makes a statement, there's some bad juju going on in here. :)

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you Frieda! It certainly isn't my normal cup of tea.

[Frieda P]

You can't always have tea, variety is the spice of life, and you spiced this up quite nicely....

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you dear, that is wonderful to hear!

[Sophy Freebirds]

Exquisitely chosen words... the three senyrus woven together giving an excellent outcome .. the wizard of Oz!! ;) this is unique babes not strange.. and yea it is hard sometimes to be accepted in different surroundings .well done. !! ;)

~Sophy

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you Sophy, I am happy that you thought it was unique. It definitely can be difficult, but we still have to muddle along and hope for the best.

[Sophy Freebirds]

Yes you are right.. was a pleasure sweety :)

[Rene Salinas]

I would't equate this a strange although the request of teeling you what I think could be considered foolish by some as that would be unleashing me and letting me be me so maybe not today. It seems that the intention is to re-fit the vessel of confusion - The second to incoorporate - To assimilate and make it mine the third one. But they way you do things is what shines Ashira your wrtings is friendly and embracing you are not up to scare anyone or push anything away and as a consequence it pours out in your writings be it a few lines or many lines.

Thankyou

[Ashira Macy]

Thanks Rene, I certainly wouldn't want to scare anyone away. There is already too little reading going on, I wouldn't want to discourage it any more. =)

[Sharon Kim]

Great job on these senryus, I really like the images you have created. With the Wizard of Oz in my mind, the second senryu is my favorite because I can really see the action happening- losing your bearings and all sense of control through a storm. Nicely done (and not too strange)! ;)

[Ashira Macy]

Thanks Sharon! It felt a little different when I wrote it, but it is growing on me.

[Sharon Kim]

You're welcome!

[joshua deathdealer]

I love this!! Left me with provoking thoughts and in wonder of your wordplay. Excellent collection here.

[Ashira Macy]

Thanks Joshua, I am so happy you liked it. =)

[Blake Fodor]

very beautiful and full of positive energy

[Ashira Macy]

Thanks Blake!