Mirage

Thought I saw you today

But it was merely a shadow.

Your voice, I swore I heard

Nothing more than an echo.

 

The dark tinted glass

That covered my eyes

Played games with my heart

And disclosed pretty lies.

 

A smile, bitter sweet

Makes my jaw burn

Because you have gone

To where there is no return.

Author's Note

Thoughts? Suggestions?

Reviews

[TheLastEclipse]

It was simple, but simplicity is not error. This was a beautifully sculpted piece. I enjoyed it because it was not lengthy, so it was easy to remain interested. Your words were relatable yet intelligent. I could empathize with the mood of the poem. Congratulations, madam.

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you so much, I appreciate the feedback, and I am glad you were able to relate!

[Katie The Neko]

The flow was wonderful. I feel like i could see this in a book some where. Thank you for writing such a clean poem ♥.

[Ashira Macy]

You are so sweet Katie, thank you so much!

[Katie The Neko]

I am only being honest. I shelved it myself :D

[Ashira Macy]

I am happy to hear that. =D

[мalғy]

I really like the way this flowed! Gives off the message to me that at first you are searching but then you face reality and realize that where they have gone there is no return. A very deep message in just few words

[Ashira Macy]

Thanks so much Tai, I am happy you liked this one and were able to see that the words are deeper than what they appear. =)

[мalғy]

That is the best kind of writing Ashira, It takes a lot of time to be able to make it that step though!