Fly Me to the Moon

And let me play among the stars...

As we gazed up at the stars that night

Feeling the light mist caressing our faces

I smiled at you and sang “Fly Me to the Moon.”

“No,” you countered as you clasped my hand in yours

And rocketed us into the darkened sky.

I marveled in wonder as we passed the Moon

Her pale face beaming at us in knowing.

Your lips brushed against mine as we drifted past Mars -

His blush deepening as we bid him farewell

And Jupiter winked his crimson eye.

But at Saturn we halted and you bowed to me,

You twirled me and hummed a waltz

As we danced across her graceful rings.

With a strike of teal lightning

She cried happy tears of crystalline carbon

Glittering bright in their mother’s radiance.

We halted in wonder as the jewels fell around us

In slow, gentle showers of precious stone,

Tickling our faces and adorning our hair.

Then one fell to my finger and there it stayed,

You looked at me with a gleam in your eye and proclaimed,

“She says you should marry me.”

Author's Note

Just a little love poem that came to me tonight. Comments? Suggestions?

Reviews

[Rachel Mason]

My favorite piece of imagery is, "And Jupiter winked his crimson eye". Gah, even though the narrator and their lover are in space, there isn't much distance between them;P I've loved this song for such a long time and your poem definitely served it justice. Now I believe that I'll be imagining the descriptions in your poem whenever I hear it again, giving the song even more meaning!

[Ashira Macy]

Aw, you are so sweet, I am so glad this called out to you. I love the song as well, Sinatra's voice, I mean come on! Haha. Thank you again dear!

[Rachel Mason]

I have such a crush on Sinatra's voice! You are very welcome. Thanks for posting the poem!

[Frozen Eyes]

A ride throughout the galaxy.. i felt i was actually riding past those heavenly bodies and the colour of romance in the piece just "WOW" Loved reading it :)

[Ashira Macy]

Thanks for your words Frozen! =)

[Ruth]

Ohh, how romantic! Stole my heart this one did, gorgeous x

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you Poppy, so happy you liked it.

[Cory Barrett]

This is gorgeous! I am usually an a*s and romantic poetry doesn't often appeal to me, but this was not run of the mill. I found my sappy self smiling on dancing on the midriff of hues you have painted. Really wonderful!

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you Cory, that means a lot. I am so glad this called out to you!

[Lyan]

it's like a little story.cute:)

[Ashira Macy]

Thanks Lyana! I like writing narrative poems. =)

[Matching Socks]

Beautiful and romantic.
When someone gives there love they give you moon, stars and the universe.
A big sigh at the end. ;)

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you Ana, I totally agree and this one was just so much fun to write!

[Blake Fodor]

Simply gorgeous! Exquisite language and imagery

[Ashira Macy]

Thanks Blake, so happy you liked it!

[John Preston]

So nice to read.
so it came in the night
Best time for a write
Do you still have the ring.?

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you John. No, this is sadly not based on truth. I did have someone who wanted to marry me a while back, and he did give me a sort of promise ring, but that didn't work out.

[John Preston]

your heart is intact
He'll never be back
Hey, I'll fight another day
love they say is around the
corner
But look what happened
to little Jack Horner

[anne]

I enjoyed the concept,the plot of the poem and so nicely described ....It must be amazing if we could jump to the solar system ....surrounded by another beauty......I loved where ever it came in your poem.....

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you so much Anne, I am so glad you enjoyed it. I have always been interested in the different planets, Saturn in particular, so I though it would be amazing to fly through them.

[AprilRN1210]

amazingly done my friend.. girl, you had the hopeless romantic in me dancing and twirling on the wings of love melting with images of stars in our lovers eyes and sincere adoration in their heart... It is breathtakingly beautiful while intellectually visual and stimulating.....

[Ashira Macy]

Aw thank you April, I always love your reviews, they make me smile. I am so happy it brought out your inner romantic, we have to let them breath now and then, right? So glad you enjoyed it, thank you again!