I have challenged myself to write one poem for each of the Seven Deadly Sins, and to use a different form for each. Here is Envy in the form of a Kyrielle. Suggestions? Comments?
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I had to read this a few times to really get into it. This one is full of important stuff. The Kyrielle is very impressive, especially since it works here. I love the photo since it helps to make this one deeper and more important. The reference to drowning is significant and literal too since its intense and so very final.
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10 Years Ago
Thank you my friend, this one was intense to write because of how much the sin really wants to see o.. read moreThank you my friend, this one was intense to write because of how much the sin really wants to see others in misery, not themselves happy. Glad you enjoyed it.
10 Years Ago
Good point! I once had a 'friend' who i realized was actually happy when things were not going we.. read moreGood point! I once had a 'friend' who i realized was actually happy when things were not going well for me. I hated that! We are no longer friends. Thats terrible to enjoy the misery of others.
This is perfect example of why this is a deadly sin, such feelings could only lean to one's own ruin...I like the intensity of your writing, it reads as though every word is being ripped out with much passion...
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10 Years Ago
Thank you so much Igarin, this sins, were a joy to write about because there is so much to be said.
I had to read this a few times to really get into it. This one is full of important stuff. The Kyrielle is very impressive, especially since it works here. I love the photo since it helps to make this one deeper and more important. The reference to drowning is significant and literal too since its intense and so very final.
Posted 10 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
10 Years Ago
Thank you my friend, this one was intense to write because of how much the sin really wants to see o.. read moreThank you my friend, this one was intense to write because of how much the sin really wants to see others in misery, not themselves happy. Glad you enjoyed it.
10 Years Ago
Good point! I once had a 'friend' who i realized was actually happy when things were not going we.. read moreGood point! I once had a 'friend' who i realized was actually happy when things were not going well for me. I hated that! We are no longer friends. Thats terrible to enjoy the misery of others.
I believe I have been guilty of mosst of the seven sins, but not gluttony, and not envy. I would never aspire to watch another drown.
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10 Years Ago
It is an awful thing to want. Envy takes pleasure in other's suffering, so it is wonderful that you .. read moreIt is an awful thing to want. Envy takes pleasure in other's suffering, so it is wonderful that you have not felt that way toward anyone.
This is well worth the read. It sheds new light on perspectives and view! I love how well you maintained the theme. I got a lot out of this. Outstanding write
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10 Years Ago
Thank you so much Susan, I am so glad you enjoyed it. It was a lot of fun to write.
It's unsettling how much of myself I see in this series of poem...heck, this one even has my surname in it haha I don't want to see anyone drown, but boy would I love some of those trinkets...
Great rhymes, great images, great poem...well done again my friend :)
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10 Years Ago
Haha, Greed might be more your style than Envy then. =P It is ok to see yourself in these, I do as w.. read moreHaha, Greed might be more your style than Envy then. =P It is ok to see yourself in these, I do as well. We all have each and every one of these in us, what is important is that we don't let them become our identity. Thank you so much for following the series, I am happy you are enjoying them!
I've been guilty of this deadly sin, please don't drown me....wickedly good! :)
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10 Years Ago
No worries Frieda dear, we have all been guilty of all of them I think. It is just important that we.. read moreNo worries Frieda dear, we have all been guilty of all of them I think. It is just important that we recognize it. Glad you enjoyed it!
10 Years Ago
Sometimes I do but I still forge ahead haha....was my pleasure Ashira!
I was anxiously waiting for this one of the sins... Envy- as i aspire to watch you drown.This one line very perfectly tells us how we can make someone's failure our motto just out of jealousy.Be glad with what you've cause even the kings get killed and the soldiers too. :) i enjoyed this a lot girl. ★ wishes for your next deadly★
~Sophy
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10 Years Ago
Thank you Sophy, this one was a lot of fun to write, and I am glad it met expectations. Not all I ha.. read moreThank you Sophy, this one was a lot of fun to write, and I am glad it met expectations. Not all I have left is Pride, and I am nervous for that one.
I am 24 years old and just getting back into writing after not using the skill for a few years, so I am a bit rusty. I am excited to share my new work as well as some old with this community and would.. more..