Envy (Seven Deadly Sins Series)

Envy (Seven Deadly Sins Series)

A Chapter by Ashira Macy

The world could grovel at my feet

Gift me with trinkets rare and sweet;

Yet I rebuke with bitter frown

As I aspire to watch you drown.

                                      

Your fortune tears at my being,

Retching from what I am seeing.

Provoked to beat you, steal your crown

As I aspire to watch you drown.

 

Green eyes will slice your privilege

And see you suffer, this I pledge -

If nothing else will pull you down,

As I aspire to watch you drown.

 

Orbs stitched shut, cruel penalty

Blackness now the one scene I see

Clawing at sockets, blood runs brown

As I aspire to watch you drown.



© 2014 Ashira Macy


Author's Note

Ashira Macy
I have challenged myself to write one poem for each of the Seven Deadly Sins, and to use a different form for each. Here is Envy in the form of a Kyrielle. Suggestions? Comments?

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I had to read this a few times to really get into it. This one is full of important stuff. The Kyrielle is very impressive, especially since it works here. I love the photo since it helps to make this one deeper and more important. The reference to drowning is significant and literal too since its intense and so very final.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ashira Macy

10 Years Ago

Haha, yeah they don't sound like a good friend at all.
Blogger

10 Years Ago

I told him that he seemed to be more of an enemy to me. He was speechless!
Ashira Macy

10 Years Ago

He probably wasn't aware of it. Sad...



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This is perfect example of why this is a deadly sin, such feelings could only lean to one's own ruin...I like the intensity of your writing, it reads as though every word is being ripped out with much passion...

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ashira Macy

10 Years Ago

Thank you so much Igarin, this sins, were a joy to write about because there is so much to be said.
I had to read this a few times to really get into it. This one is full of important stuff. The Kyrielle is very impressive, especially since it works here. I love the photo since it helps to make this one deeper and more important. The reference to drowning is significant and literal too since its intense and so very final.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ashira Macy

10 Years Ago

Haha, yeah they don't sound like a good friend at all.
Blogger

10 Years Ago

I told him that he seemed to be more of an enemy to me. He was speechless!
Ashira Macy

10 Years Ago

He probably wasn't aware of it. Sad...
I believe I have been guilty of mosst of the seven sins, but not gluttony, and not envy. I would never aspire to watch another drown.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ashira Macy

10 Years Ago

It is an awful thing to want. Envy takes pleasure in other's suffering, so it is wonderful that you .. read more
I like this one because it gets to the heart of the matter, and it is not a pretty heart.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ashira Macy

10 Years Ago

You are correct, Envy is not a pretty feeling to have, and their fate is unpleasant as well.
This is well worth the read. It sheds new light on perspectives and view! I love how well you maintained the theme. I got a lot out of this. Outstanding write

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ashira Macy

10 Years Ago

Thank you so much Susan, I am so glad you enjoyed it. It was a lot of fun to write.
just saying, this is such a great series! very original idea and brilliantly executed

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ashira Macy

10 Years Ago

Thanks Crystal, I am happy you like them!
It's unsettling how much of myself I see in this series of poem...heck, this one even has my surname in it haha I don't want to see anyone drown, but boy would I love some of those trinkets...

Great rhymes, great images, great poem...well done again my friend :)



Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ashira Macy

10 Years Ago

Haha, Greed might be more your style than Envy then. =P It is ok to see yourself in these, I do as w.. read more
I've been guilty of this deadly sin, please don't drown me....wickedly good! :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ashira Macy

10 Years Ago

No worries Frieda dear, we have all been guilty of all of them I think. It is just important that we.. read more
Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Sometimes I do but I still forge ahead haha....was my pleasure Ashira!
I was anxiously waiting for this one of the sins... Envy- as i aspire to watch you drown.This one line very perfectly tells us how we can make someone's failure our motto just out of jealousy.Be glad with what you've cause even the kings get killed and the soldiers too. :) i enjoyed this a lot girl. ★ wishes for your next deadly★

~Sophy

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ashira Macy

10 Years Ago

Thank you Sophy, this one was a lot of fun to write, and I am glad it met expectations. Not all I ha.. read more
Envy. A deadly sin. I like the way you described the thoughts and actions of the words envy. Thank you for the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ashira Macy

10 Years Ago

Thanks so much Coyote, it is one of a series. All I have left to write is Pride.
Coyote Poetry

10 Years Ago

A very good topic to write about. I started and never finished my story of the deadly sins.

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