Wrath (Seven Deadly Sins Series)

To hell with your unabashed privilege and passion!

I am not one to be crossed, all brimstone and fire.

Flames licking at my feet as I am drenched in incendiary spite

For your lawless, scorn filled claims of revenge.

Ha! I must say, you clearly are a daring devil

To challenge me now when I taste naught but rage.

 

You know nothing of my weapon, I choose rage

To beat you blind until I drink your bloody passion

Filled heart and throw your remnants down to appease the devil;

So he can laugh as you sizzle, roasting in his hell fire!

This is my idea of sweet, savory revenge

And you shall regret becoming the target of my violent spite!

 

Perhaps we have not come to an understanding in spite

Of all my warnings that you would wither under my rage.

The sheer determination to acquire my revenge

Should shake you down to your impure soul with pain of passion

Can you not feel the swelter of the fire?

Here it cometh in smoke, only for you… my daft devil.

 

In my ceaseless quest for justice they have named me the devil,

Demon of acrid anger and consumed in harsh spite;

But I know the truth that penetrates the fire.

Sinners must perish by the sword forged in the heat of rage;

And that I despise them with scorching passion

Only fuels my thirst for gore riddled revenge.

 

I will commit my aforementioned revenge

Through infernal torment - aided by my devil.

If I could pity it would be for your lost passion

As you spiraled down into your twisted web of spite

And became encompassed in a red fit of rage

That led you to your burning place within the fire.

 

Alas! It is I who is strewn across the coals of that fire!

Does not God understand my journey for lawful revenge?

I feel my limbs ripped from me in his hellish rage

Consumed by my own cohort - why my dear devil?

He steals my madness and smothers me in my spite,

Pirating what is left in my canteen of passion.

 

Agony incites his fire as it absorbs my passion

Draining my revenge and devouring my spite

Nothing is left of my righteous rage, but the cackle of the devil.

Author's Note

I have challenged myself to write a poem for all of the Seven Deadly Sins, each in a different form. Here is Wrath in the form of a Sestina. This was the hardest one to compose so far by a long shot. Suggestions? Comments?

Reviews

[RubyOmma]

I liked the first part the best. Very powerful! Awesome work. In the middle I got a bit lost. The ending didn't seem to quite make it come together. But overall it is very good. I love your use of strong words and images. My favorite is "all brimstone and fire" (I can see you wielding a brimstone that is flaming) I would say here it comes instead of cometh. It sounds too wordy and throws off the reader. Please retuyrn the favor and give me a review on some of my writing?

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you for your honest feedback Ruby, I am glad you enjoyed it overall. I definitely owe you a visit.

[Igarin]

I love this, so much passion and intensity, wow...

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you! This was one of my favorites to write!

[Blogger]

This one seems different somehow. It seems more professional and like you spent more time with it? Its flows very nicely.

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you so much my friend, Sestinas are no joke, so I had to spend some serious time working with this one to make it sound new in every stanza. That and Wrath is actually the sin I most identify with, believe it or not.

[MAD ENGLISHMAN]

Not much to say.
A great piece of writing.
B-R-I-L-L-I-A-N-T.
Clive

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you so much Clive, I am glad you enjoyed it!

[kublakhan27]

Well first off, wow, a sestina! If anyone ever questioned your poetic prowess (which I highly doubt) their argument is no longer valid...the more I think about this series of yours, the more I realize just how intertwined all of these sins are...to be honest, I don't even know how to review a sestina in terms of subject matter as they are so intricate in terms of imagery and so on, but you already know how much I respect your work :) For the record, I have written one of these, but it's not this deep, and definitely not as good ;)

[Ashira Macy]

Wow, thank you so much Steve! I really appreciate your feedback on this one. It was an uphill battle all the way trying to make each stanza seem fresh while reusing the end words, and I doubt I will be attempting it again any time soon! I am sure you sestina is just wonderful sir, I would love to see it, I have not read many of these. =)

[kublakhan27]

Always a pleasure Sophy :) That was my exact thought after I did mine haha...it's not a subject you'll be familiar with so I tried to tell it like a story...I'm more proud of the fact that I pulled it off than I am for the quality of it ;)

http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/kublakhan27/1100222/

[Frieda P]

I must applaud you Ashira, you've done such an outstanding job with each of these deadly sins, this is par excellence...I have to agree with Coyote, I think this might be the worst sin of all, it's usually destructive in its wake...I'm in awe, you haven't missed a beat yet with this spectacular series. Brava!

[Ashira Macy]

Aw thank you so much Frieda, that means so much coming from you and I am ecstatic that you enjoyed them. Wrath can be pretty intimidating, I agree, though it is described as a desire for justice perverted by anger. Personally I think Envy scares me the most. ;)

[Frieda P]

It's funny, not ha ha funny but any of these sins can lead us down the path to another greater sin, depends on what you're envious about I guess... ;)

[Ashira Macy]

That is very true. I think that is one of the things I find so interesting about the sins. They are mostly just the gateways to greater evil.

[Frieda P]

Thanks god poetry and dark chocolate aren't a sin, or I'm going straight to bloody hell! ;)

[Ashira Macy]

Haha! I am right there with you girl!

[Coyote Poetry]

I believe wrath is one of the worst sins. Lead to murder, causing suffering and powerful anger that cause permanent separation. You did well. Wrath is easily to see and hard to describe. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you Coyote, it is true, Wrath is certainly a terror.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[Marie]

Not just wrath but revenge. I guess the two go together. Very well put. Wrath burns itself out in the end. Such passion cannot be sustained.

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you Marie, very well put! Something can't burn so rapidly without fizzling out.

[Fran Marie]

you got guts girl...writing this form is like pulling teeth...I only wrote one Sestina, whew what
an undertaking...excellent piece here on wrath... Kudos

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you kindly Fran, it was quite a challenge as you said, and I don't plan on taking it on again any time soon, though I am glad this one worked out. =)

[Fran Marie]

I hear that...once was enough for me

[realmwriter]

My revenge, should I seek to exact it upon you will not be swift. You will suffer much as I take my time to fill your soul with pain and fear sublime. You will writhe in agony as I tear at you flesh and devour your mind. I am the kind of demon you cannot fight I am hateful, fearful, unabashed pain of delight. I come swiftly and leave slow to burn, for I do to you, for cessation you will yearn. I am the thing that fear can feel , I am the pain that wicked can't deal. I will tear you limb from mottled limb, just to watch your tortured figure pulsing, twitching, bleeding on the floor. I am anger, I am rage, I am the dragon loosed from it's cage. I seek you my victim, not for joy, but instead for an awful panicked cloy. Your soul will weep at my blistered feet. I am that from which there is no escape, the deepest, foulest, acrid breath. I am Wrath, wicked death.

Sorry about that, but when I am inspired by a piece, such as I was here, I simply must write till I find the course through. You have written a very good piece here and taken the previous Sin Write to whole new level.

[Ashira Macy]

Never apologize for your art, it was a pleasure to read and an honor that I had a hand in inspiring it. Thank you for this poetic response, it is one of the best I have had yet. =)

[realmwriter]

You are most welcome. I copied it to my page and you can certainly read it if you like, made a couple small changes. Nothing to big.