Swan Song

Swan Song

A Poem by Ashira Macy
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Dedicated to my love for the stage.

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She drags cherry stain across puckered lips,

Orchestra sounding in Overture.

The stranger staring back through the mirror,

Pale and beautiful like the moon.

 

She takes her leave down the darkened stairwell

Straight on to center stage,

Crimson curtain shielding her from eager stares.

Eyes closed and palms sweating she breathes in…

 

And out.

In…

And out.

In…

 

And as the curtain rises and amber light engulfs her

She feels the battered wood beneath her feet

Vibrate with pregnant anticipation.

 

Her breath comes out in melodious soprano,

Woodwinds painting her a sorrowful scene,

Brass ripping at her heart with harmonies,

And strings tying her to the spot.

 

A tear forms in her painted eye

As her ballad crescendos in climax,

And rolls down her cheek

At percussion’s final beat.

 

The roar from the audience

Falls on deaf ears

As the spotlight fades to black.

She bids her old friend a watery

Farewell.

© 2014 Ashira Macy


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Ashira Macy
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A truly beautiful and moving piece my friend...I've been to many plays and even a couple of operas (inlcuing Les Miserables) and I've always preferred stage acting to movies by an overwhelming margin...I always wonder what it's like behind the curtains amid the shuffle of wardrobe changes and everything else that must be going on down there, and I wonder what's going through their minds between scenes...lovely work :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ashira Macy

10 Years Ago

Thanks so much Steve, I am so glad you enjoyed it! There is honestly nothing more exciting for me th.. read more
kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

Haha I'm sure it is...it must be such an odd dynamic, but that's what makes stage actors great...the.. read more



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Brass ripping at her heart with harmonies,
This is my favorite line its almost as if she is engulfed by the harmonies.great job :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


Crazy dramatic and exploding with intense imagery.
Amazing sights and sounds. Great work!

Posted 10 Years Ago


Thats beautiful.I imagined watching swan lake though I never watched a live stage performance. It is thought provoking and i can actually feel the air of performance. Great piece

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ashira Macy

10 Years Ago

Thank you Sindu, I am glad it brought you in!
A truly beautiful and moving piece my friend...I've been to many plays and even a couple of operas (inlcuing Les Miserables) and I've always preferred stage acting to movies by an overwhelming margin...I always wonder what it's like behind the curtains amid the shuffle of wardrobe changes and everything else that must be going on down there, and I wonder what's going through their minds between scenes...lovely work :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ashira Macy

10 Years Ago

Thanks so much Steve, I am so glad you enjoyed it! There is honestly nothing more exciting for me th.. read more
kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

Haha I'm sure it is...it must be such an odd dynamic, but that's what makes stage actors great...the.. read more
It is really good! very poetic, and paints a very vivid picture in my mind! it is just beautifully written, and the words are placed in such a poetic order! great job, Amy

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Shapirta

10 Years Ago

How is that hard? Its like uh shee ruh macy right?
Ashira Macy

10 Years Ago

Exactly, but for some reason people still have issues with it. Go figure.
Shapirta

10 Years Ago

Weird!! =)
I loved this so much imaginary in this
piece You've written thank you for sharing.


I loved these stanza's lines here.



She drags cherry stain across puckered lips,



Orchestra sounding in Overture.

The stranger staring back through the mirror,

Pale and beautiful like the moon.



Her breath comes out in melodious soprano,

Woodwinds painting her a sorrowful scene,

Brass ripping at her heart with harmonies,

And strings tying her to the spot.


Thank you for your lovely review
and comments you left on my page and this
lovely piece.


blessings. Benita / Kindred poet

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ashira Macy

10 Years Ago

Thank you again my dear, I am so glad this piece sang to you. =D
Benita-Staebell M - KindredPoet

10 Years Ago

was a Pleasure to read like the others I truly Enjoyed this read. you're very welcome. Blessings. B.. read more
What I love most about your poems is the way your words melt together to paint scenes vivid with the full feeling of what you describe. You use beautiful, simple words, linked to each other almost perfectly without needless details that would make your images more concrete but less alive. Your line structure also is great at making the poem flow, bringing the right feelings under the spotlight at the right times.
The first stanza is my favorite. The imagery is wild, and there's the question of who the stranger is -maybe her role, maybe performance itself, and in a way possibly connected with the audience. Whoever the stranger is, it stares back through a mirror, pale and beautiful as the moon.
I also always love when words describe music, and you did that really well.
Great poem!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ashira Macy

10 Years Ago

Thank you Benito, for your wonderfully articulated review! I am so happy you are moved by my words. .. read more
The imagery you give us in the verse...captures the moment...as you read this and become part of the scenery...the feel of the person on stage about to perform --- all the way down to the final --- as she becomes one with her world...just glides --- and ends...I did like your your take in the beginning:

Eyes closed and palms sweating she breathes in…

And out.
In…
And out.
In…

and off she goes into the performance...
I did not see anything out of the norm...
within this write...

Posted 10 Years Ago


Ashira Macy

10 Years Ago

Thank you, I am honored that this piece brought you into it as you read. =) I wanted this to make th.. read more
Glen Yumang Manese

10 Years Ago

you're welcome...
So wonderful again my friend, this starts with sheer class, and rich imagination, I can't tell you how great you are in writing. This is wonderful cabaret, it could on stage, depending on the "title" I think it is... Gives me an Russian ballet feeling ;) if so we have that in common too... you will find out lol. Once, I posted this piece of music with one of my writings, it would fit here too.... Are you a dancer? :)

You feel the music, of the dance, and you just are music... thank you for this beautiful piece.

Here is the link: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=aCuX8IJT-_w

- Elisa


Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

Nah that's awesome, how cool you tell me this. I could feel the love, you bring out of that stage in.. read more
Ashira Macy

10 Years Ago

It seems as though it is the same for you my dear! Piano and guitar? Two wonderful instruments that .. read more

10 Years Ago

Hahaha, that's what I was thinking too ^^ lol how funny that would be! In my free time, I do this mo.. read more
I really enjoyed the flow with which you write and the beautiful imagery that comes to mind when I am reading this. Well done!

Posted 10 Years Ago


Ashira Macy

10 Years Ago

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing, I am glad you enjoyed it. =)

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Added on July 21, 2014
Last Updated on July 21, 2014
Tags: stage, performing, sadness, farewell, music, acting, drama

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Ashira Macy
Ashira Macy

Martinez, CA



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