End

There goes my mind again

Remembering what it feels like to kiss you.

Dishonest are these visions!

I have felt you but twice and passion is fleeting.

There is a world to be missed,

There is a vast universe to be gained.

Reviews

[Glen Yumang Manese]

Those two last line add much depth to the atmosphere you render here:

There is a world to be missed,
There is a vast universe to be gained.

--- in the lines...the rest is the filler...of what was in the scheme of things...yet there is only one world as we know it...in finding...so stay grounded and just go fishing for one...

[Ashira Macy]

Fabulous summation and take away Glen. It is true, we have so much around us that we don't notice when we are so involved in one world.

[Glen Yumang Manese]

Voyager has gone to the edge of our galaxy ---still has not found one thing...may your not suppose to find --- but sacrifice for it...

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the poem. Showing regret in the words and led the reader to some hope. The memory is a two sided coin. Make us wish for things we cannot have. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you so much Coyote, I am glad you enjoyed it! =)

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome. You did very well with the minimum use of words.

[Lady Glitter]

I like your verbal depiction of this tug-o-war, "...There is a world to be missed,
There is a vast universe to be gained..."

Which way do we go? Aging away and living in mouldy memories? But no. We wake up, shake loose the spiderweb tendrils of past endings, and strike out to experience the promising future.

[Ashira Macy]

I love how you put that, very poetic and true. We can't live in the past lest we fade away, we have to trudge toward a better tomorrow.

[Lady Glitter]

Lol! And sometimes it DOES feel like trudging, I agree :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

sometimes there are worlds of love we just don't belong to, we just can't mesh with...
we have the memories yes, but there is much more to explore outside that relationship...


passion is definitely ephemeral.

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you so much Jacob, I completely agree. Compatibility is not a skill to be learned, it is a test to be taken.

[Lyan]

Ah yes, love can definatley be a b****. It is heartbreaking when it ends, go through lots of turmoil. but in the end we grow stronger, knowledgeable, and hopefully ready to see what else (or who else) will come into our lives. *hug*

[Ashira Macy]

Thanks love! I am sure you know what this is about. I don't think I am ready for a "who else" yet, got to grow on my own first. =)

[Lyan]

yea it's understandable:) take your time. it will happen when it needs to happen u know.

[Ashira Macy]

It most definitely will!

[Matching Socks]

The end is tough but I love your ending, a bit of hope in the knowledge that there's a whole universe out there of other experiences.
Good write Ashira.

[Ashira Macy]

Thanks again for your support Ance, I always hate endings until I realize their true potential.

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

Its holds deep meaning nice one!

[Ashira Macy]

Thanks so much, I am glad you enjoyed it. =)