I like the calm, easiness of this verse. The description turquoise tides evokes lovely imagery. The last 2 lines bear double meaning for me. Shallow artistry means minor magnificence compared to what is underneath. Also that the shallow artistry has magnificent beauty in itself.
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Thanks so much, I am glad you found this one meaningful. I have always loved to just stare at the oc.. read moreThanks so much, I am glad you found this one meaningful. I have always loved to just stare at the ocean. Its such a magnificent living body.
The ocean is a whole other world isnt it? We behold only the skin of the ocean and revel in its beauty (As you say..."Shallow artistry") when in fact that's only one layer of its wondrous multi-faceted splendour. This one was wonderfully written, no word was wasted, quite an instructive display of an economy of words. And the latin! I have always had a penchant for latin, its words are so beautiful, the heart and soul of the English Language. Well done!
To me, as reader, the poem is all about appreciation and the ability to appreciate. It is also about the knowledge that there is a world beneath the world, a world not always visible to the eye, but perhaps visible to some other less physical human organ, say the imagination or the soul.
Congratulations!
This piece made it to the top 9 out of 226 submissions.
As your reward, I am sending out RRs on your behalf.
I encourage you to submit this piece to the Promote Me! group's library where the winning pieces of previous contests reside. http://www.writerscafe.org/groups/Promote-Me%21/11216/
Below is the link to vote for Promote Me! III. Voting closes August 15th, 2014.
http://www.writerscafe.org/contests/Promote-Me%21-III-%28Poetry%29/50213/
This is excellent. Conveyed so skillfully. The thoughts roll down the page into the poet's creative heart. I enjoy the form, the flow and the bright message.
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10 Years Ago
Thank you Susan, I am so happy you read this one. One of my happier pieces. XD
I am 24 years old and just getting back into writing after not using the skill for a few years, so I am a bit rusty. I am excited to share my new work as well as some old with this community and would.. more..