Speculation of a Raven

Dark poem written in my adolescence.

Darkness.

A journey to my mind would give you complete darkness.

I search my soul and find the same thing,

A void where love, compassion and happiness once rested.

A raven.

Ever an omen of bad news,

Foreboding and malicious.

I see my mind and soul transform into this bird of sorrow.

Tears.

The hateful liquid forms in my eyes and threatens to emerge.

My thoughts cry out to me, “No! Tears show weakness, do not be weak!”

As they stream down my face I am once again left in the darkness, abandoned by thoughts.

Fools.

Friends, family, therapists.

They know everything, yet at the same time… nothing.

Try as they may they cannot hope to understand that which I myself struggle to decipher.

Or perhaps I am the fool to not know why I feel what I feel.

Freedom.

I long for this with every fiber of my being.

There are two roads to freedom, one long, the other short.

Both roads end in death.

To be truly free you must not be tied to the earth.

Death.

The destination of both roads.

Does the short road lead to freedom as well?

I go on asking questions I would have to answer myself.

Darkness,

A raven,

Tears,

Fools,

Freedom

Death.

Author's Note

My 15 year old self was already pretty dark I guess. I am interested in what people take away from this.

Reviews

[RAOrourke]

Yes this is a dark piece but many good writings come from deep raw emotions. 15 year olds are full of emotions that are hard to understand and you captured this beautifully from the inside. It shows the pain and emotion a teen can feel during this time and to be misunderstood at the same time is a sad a painful time. Well done in capture all of this.

[Ashira Macy]

Thanks so much for reading and reviewing this one, I am glad you liked it.

[John Ryan]

very wonderful feel to your piece here

very very very very very enjoyable read

[Ashira Macy]

Thanks so much John.

[Rita L. Sev]

A good piece of dark poetry, and actually, a great piece from a 15 year old poet. It's always interesting to lok back on early writes. Thanks for sharing this, Ashira!

[Ashira Macy]

Thanks Rita! Yeah it is interesting to look and see what you were in the past.

[Eve Ola]

Bravo.... its amazing, I enjoyed the FOOL part...same question i have "Does the short road lead to freedom as well?" Well done here

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you Eve, I am glad you liked it!

[Mayank]

super dark free verse... seems like coming directly out of Poe's head.

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you Mayank, that is very flattering!

[Avinash]

It is a search Ashira which matters. Nobody could find themselves unless they got lost in darkness. There was time when I was too contemplating different ways of ending my life everyday too around 15-16 yrs. But it also taught me how to take every day as a gift and something special. It is our journey and nobody can walk it for us at best they can just walk with us. Intense and dark but I loved it because I could relate with it very well. I somehow believe that darkness comes from the fact that the world knows nothing about you despite their claims. You have to make that journey.

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you for your insightful review Avinash, I am so glad you related to this and that is spoke to you.

[Delmar Cooper]

Thank you for sharing this. It went a long way toward answering the Hatter's question. A raven is like a writing desk because poems like this can come from both.

[Ashira Macy]

Haha, what a cool reference! The Mad Hatter is one of my favorite Alice in Wonderland Characters.

[Bill O. Writes]

Great job on this. Hard to think it was so long ago considering the quality of this. At any age, this is a very good read.

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you so much Bill!

[Frozen Eyes]

"Tears.
The hateful liquid forms in my eyes and threatens to emerge.."
"Freedom.
I long for this with every fiber of my being"
Best of raven's darkness.. Loved it..

[Ashira Macy]

Thanks so much Frozen!

[MsJewel]

A dark and real description of depression that draws the reader and allows them to feel the emotion you describe. At 15 you showed so much maturity in your writing. Truly an outstanding piece of writing.

:) Julie

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you Julie, you are very sweet. Depression is a crazy thing, and sometimes the best way to heal yourself is through art.

[Kringefest]

An amazing write with a splendid finish. Nicely done!

[Ashira Macy]

Thanks so much!