Didn't Take Long

Go.

Before the sun has even set,

Its rays still touching down.

Go.

While the wound is still fresh

Pour in the salt and stitch it up.

Go.

Toss kindling on your new flame,

Don’t bother to douse the old.

Go.

Understand the consequences though,

I will not be moved, but I will be changed,

So go,

And stay gone.

Reviews

[Lady Glitter]

Love the finality, the tenseness, the gentle brutality. This type of foresight and jadedness of course comes from unwanted experience. I like this verse too because it is short and blunt. No words or time wasted. Indeed, this life is too short to be wasted on idealism, isn't it? No rose-colored glasses or head in the sand for you. Bravo!

[Ashira Macy]

Thanks again Glitter, I was definitely feeling savage when I wrote this piece. No time for sparing feelings when the other has no regard for them. I thank you for your words.

[Matching Socks]

Wow, talk about adding insult to injury.
But I love the strong finality of the ending.
Tough words to say, and stick to sometimes.
Great write my friend.

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you my dear, they were tough, but this one just bled out of me in the spur of the moment.

[Matching Socks]

Anytime my friend. :)

[Glen Yumang Manese]

Well...the beat of the drum in this verse...the clutch with:

"Go"

and then the aftermath of affirmation...and the ending conclusion:

So go,
And stay gone.

[Ashira Macy]

I never thought of the word as a drum beat, but now that you put it out there, yes that does make sense.

[Glen Yumang Manese]

its all on how you view it...others may feel different...

[Lyan]

I like it but yikes comes to my mind, sad sad:/

[Ashira Macy]

Lol, I know right? A lot of my stuff is sad, though I am trying to branch out more.

[Lyan]

Dude.. if you think your stuff is sad and that a lot of it is sad. you wait till I post a good portion of my writing, you will be thinking that yours is pretty sane and not that sad.lol

[Ashira Macy]

I can't wait! I have a few people who I think you should check out too. Really wonderful writers.

[RAOrourke]

Well done, the flow of your poem was nice and your words ring true for so many whom have been hurt by love. well done

[Ashira Macy]

Thank you so much for the comment. I am glad it was relatable. =)

[erika]

Wow I found this poem really moving

[Ashira Macy]

Thanks so much Erika, I am glad you enjoyed it.