Mental Hospital is to Mental Patient as Errors are to Circuit Systems

Mental Hospital is to Mental Patient as Errors are to Circuit Systems

A Chapter by Victor Cartel
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I don't know if you could tell from all the noises and the crazy way things have been laid out, but this is DEFINITELY a slam poem meant for a drama kid...ehem - ME! :D

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KEY:

the bold words=a sound effect

the crossed out words=actions

the italics words=sung


EXTRA NOTE:

If you want to understand the story behind this nonsense, read the Note for Reviewers!


Mental Hospital is to Mental Patient as Errors are to Circuit Systems

I’m disturbed, can’t you see?

I’m insane; prefer the term “crazy”

Zzzt…

Please, come in!

Make yourself comfortable!

Would you like a cup of tea?

Would you like a cup of tea?

Would you like a cup of…*tilt head* tea?

Zzzt…

I’m all alone here…

On my own here…

Without a family to call my own…

*giggles*

Zzzt…

Stay Gold, Ponyboy…

Zzzt…

I’ve seen a lot of things,

Things you have not seen,

On the side you call: the other side…

I’ve been there; oh I’ve been there…

Zzzt…

It’s hard being in love when the guy doesn’t love you back.

I would know…I’m there.  What else would drive me over the"

Zzzt…

I’m all alone here…

On my own here…

Without a family to call my"

Would you"would you"

Would you like a cup of tea?

Zzzt…

Romeo, Romeo!

Where art thou Romeo!

My Romeo...has fallen?

…Then why didn’t someone help him up?

Zzzt…

Madam and Sir,

I’ve arranged a special dinner for you at the table.

Candlelight, or if you prefer,

I can"

Zzzt…

Never fear!  Generic Super hero is here!

I fight crime, I support justice, and most of all…

I’m HOT.

Zzzt…

Daaaa daaaa daaa da da da da dada da daaa!

Zzzt…

You know what I hate the most?

When the voices is my head argue"argue"argue"argue--!

Heh…heh…

Woops!

Broke the tape!

*rewind*

Did you know that humans eat an average of 8 spiders in their life time?

I know, scary stuff out there…that’s why I don’t go outside much.

Zzzt…

*grab head " act like it’s all in your mind*

Stop laughing!

Stop laughing!

Enough.

That’s what got me here in the first place…

Zzzt…

I’m all alone here…

On my own here…

Without a family to call my own…

Zzzt…

BROKEN CIRCUIT.   ERROR CODE 436

PLEASE ENTER CODE"*shut down*

I’m all alone here…

On my own here…

Without a family to call my own…

He left me here all alone…

Without a place to call Home…

I’m all alone here…

On my own here…

Without a love to caaall myyyy oooown…

Zzzt…

Would you"Would you like a cup of tea?



© 2012 Victor Cartel


Author's Note

Victor Cartel
The story behind the poem is that there is a girl who falls in love with a guy, so they get together and they're very happy for a while until he breaks up with her and in response to this the girl goes crazy. In order to cope with her loss, she lives within her own head and lives like a robot basically, trying to "delete" the memory of her ex and find the correct "radio station" to suit her lifestyle. Sometimes, however, she realizes how human she is and she goes back to her old self: the times when she sings or talks about her situation. She doesn't stay long though, and as the quickly spoken poem progresses she always ends up "changing the channel."

I'd love to preform this one again. I'm very proud of it :3 And its definitely better spoken than read because, yes, there are certain ways things are said, and the song...you can't just read lyrics and get the tune down. Never happens lolz

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