My Hue

A poem that expresses one's strong faith towards his creator

As He strokes my hand with the pencil.
My bosom shouted for the greatness I felt.
My trust made my life so well,
As an ice in summer that will never melt.

As He mixes the colors in my heart,
I mention His name without a reward.
My world's mate almost tear me apart,
But His light says, "Move forward."

As He shades the edge of my faith,
My eyes clearly saw His face.
Even others said that maybe His a myth;
I believe He's the person behind the grace.

As the lines of my life continue,
Color harmony is there to be the best part.
And when it's unpleasant hue,
He'll cast catchy pigment that proves life is an art.

Reviews

[Joshua Clement]

You have a way of lifting the heart with your words... keep it up, and as always, thanks for posting. I really enjoyed this!

[Ashadan]

Thank you for reviewing my work. Im glad for your kind words ^_^ Have a nice day ahead.

[gabrielle]

This is a well thought of poem. I particularly admire the meticulous and consistent rhyme scheme that was employed in here. "ice in summer that will never melt"- this imagery will linger long in my mind. Well-done, Ashadan!

[Ashadan]

thanks for the inspiring words that you said there. I'm glad that you like it. Have a nice day ahead.

[Maumil Mehraj]

God took so much time and effort to create the universe, and here we are, trying to prove god is a scientific phenomena or a chemical reaction! The poem was beautifully penned and was very profound.
Well done!
Maumil

[Ashadan]

Thanks for the kind words. I'm glad that you like it =)

[Ashadan]

hope you will also read the others that I posted =)

[Maumil Mehraj]

sure i will :)

[Ashadan]

Happy to hear that =)

[RomaJ]

"As He mixes the colors in my heart"
Beautiful and profound.
I am humbled by this truly heartfelt and touching poem.
So sweetly done.

[Ashadan]

thank you for stopping by. I'm glad that you like it ^_^

[DoormanDan]

Ahh, the nice smell of creativity at its finest. I really like how you wrote this, it really adds a new twist to an old format. You really make it sound like this is written from the POV of a cartoon or drawing of some sort. It's original writing like this that I look forward to reading! :)

[Ashadan]

Thank you for that inspiring review =) Im glad for spending the time of reading this =)

[Coyote Poetry]

Strong statements leading to a very good ending.
"My world's mate almost tear me apart,
But His light says, "Move forward."
I agree with the above lines. Go forward and hold your faith proudly. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Ashadan]

thank for your compliment =) Have a nice day ahead

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[B]

Beautiful work here
I love the flow and hidden rhythm

[613]

A poem that flows well is one I enjoy; nice job!

- Brittney

[Ashadan]

Thank you. I'm glad that you appreciated it.

[613]

Sure thing! I look forward to reading more from you.

[Ashadan]

Glad to hear that my friend =)