You Deserve This

Um im not quite sure. I was going through a bad breakup. lmao!

Oh lord,
The water is coming in
Filling your lungs
Can you talk yourself out of this one?

I sit laughing
Watching
My stomach is in pain
How terrible it must feel.
You deserved it.

 

 

 

 

 

 

On your back
Breathing ceases to exist
Coughing inhabits
Quickly bringing tragedy
You deserve this.

 

This is death,
It takes your will;
Takes your breath.

I only wish it was me,
Not the disease,

Who took you away.

 

 

 

Face tints blue,
Your eyes tatooed with panic
The serated needle 
Contains the remedy

Too bad it's just out of reach

Oh babe! 
What a perfect ending.

:D

Reviews

[jumbie's #1 fan]

Oh wow, sadistic, much? Hahaha, well I don't blame you, every girl's wished death on ex before. Great job

[Staci Brown]

Damn girl!!! i love the passion you put into this piece! now, forget poetry and put this talent to work writing fiction!!!! :D

Faerie Blessings!

--faerie whisper (breaking the silence...)

[Disa Sig]

Well written. I can see the scenario taking place. As a reader I was drawn into the picture this poem portrays.

[Chloe Madison Taylor.]

"your eyes tatooed with panic"
kickass line. I havent heard that one yet.

[Artic the Fallen]

this one seems almost bitter. I like it alot. Its very well writting

[Cresent_Rose]

This reminds me of how i'll feel when a boyfriend breaks up with me or something. IT ROCKS!! :)