Heroes are alive

This poem has been written in the tezra rima style. It's my first time writing in that style, and I love experimenting.

They had lived and acheived many a great

Deeds of service, deeds of honour with pride

But just as the useless~ they had their fate.

 

Young, maybe God loved them for it, they died

The others, some similing, some suffering...

Were the oldest, and their loved ones had cried

 

These heroes, called 'immortals' in writing

Died with a bullet or sword in their chest

All left of them are songs minstrels sing

 

Lone authors of the night- with dirty vest

In the day break- rub their eyes and smile~

Magical transcriptions~ they did their best

 

GOLDEN PAGES OF HEROES ARE ALIVE...

 

Author's Note

I do not think this has come as well as the other poems as mine...

Reviews

[Eric Cox]

I like this style, poem has good impact to it, cool light in the tribute vibe to this. Nicely done.

[Krithika Raghavan]

"cool light in the tribute vibe?" gee, thanks;-)

[Eric Cox]

sorry, I was trying to compliment. Is an excellent piece.

[Krithika Raghavan]

Huh? Oh dear, I think I sounded sarcastic, no, I actually thought that the comment was cool;-) No one's ever given me such a cool review before...lol.
And that was not sarcasm... I was delighted with that review;-)

[Yellow Butterfly]

They had lived and achieved many a great
Deeds of service, deeds of honour with pride
But just as the useless~ they had their fate

The more we write the better we develop our style... this was brilliant and inspiring

keep penning...

[Krithika Raghavan]

WHy, thank you. I agree that we write better when we develop styles. Actually, i think this poem lacks my style...

[Yellow Butterfly]

Only because you were experimenting... there are so many ways to write poetry.... especially dependent on your thoughts at the time...

[Krithika Raghavan]

*smile* Yes, I agree with that too. Thank you;-)

[Yellow Butterfly]

Your welcome..... keep penning your own style.... and inspiring others with your great work on WC. :o)

[sithlordjp]

I know terza ryma can be a hard style, but you did a wonderful job with this!

[Krithika Raghavan]

Oh, well, that's certainly a nice thing to say. You just made my day;-)

[poeticpiers]

A first attempt at Terza Rima ,a worthy effort M'lady

[Krithika Raghavan]

You think? Hmm... Well then, THank you! It was pretty hard to write, or maybe I was just lacking inspiration;-)

[WingsToFly]

Lone authors of the night- with dirty vest

In the day break- rub their eyes and smile~

Magical transcriptions~ they did their best

I like this poem and style. Enjoyable to read. You've done a good job

[Krithika Raghavan]

THank you so very much... That was a beautiful complement you've given me;-)

[lee von cleef]

The fight,live the passion, put your heroes down on the paper let them be life ,rebels ,renegades to win the lost cause,stand tall let them walk with blue light.Peal the joy out of their personality and let us feel them.

[Krithika Raghavan]

That was a beautiful way to reply to this comparitively dim poem;-)

[Terra Hart]

Yes, Heroes are alive in the pages, but not in the flesh. Yet I suppose that is a reason why they're alive in the pages. I LIKED it! :) It was a good poem! (trying to be non-lenient) :)

[Krithika Raghavan]

Thanks, Sparky... And thanks for trying-_-'

[Terra Hart]

You're welcome! ....I think I was very successful! :)