Fluid in my Spine

Sometimes, I just feel GREAT!

Sometimes I get this feeling,

one that I cannot properly differentiate from others

it is at first a pop,

spark,

then fizzle!

The next thing I know I am woven,

fluid is in my spine and I just can’t stop!

Weave it to the left,

snaking back to the right;

such an exhilarating experience!

As high as a kite,

when a baby bird first takes flight

I dance under the influence of the sun,

and softly sway under the withered gaze of

the deep-rooted moon.

 

I must say, it reminds me oddly of the taste of wine,

this phenomenal fluid that is in my spine!

Author's Note

What is this spell? Another poem!? This is outrageous! I cannot write a poem to save my twelfth dimesional life, and here I am with another!? Well, this is more than likely going to be another piece of garbage, but enjoy (if you can) mortals~

(And yes, this is how I felt yesterday, whilst dancing to the amazing cover of "99 balloons" by Goldfinger <3)

Reviews

[Latsyric]

Now I have the sudden urge to dance around in my room with 99 Red Balloons blasting on my MP3.

This is a MAGNIFICENT poem, perfectly explaining the wonderful feeling when you dance to a song you love. ;)

[Short.Nerd]

Wonderful! You did an outstanding job writing this (:

[Cee. Es.]

this poem gave me the hebegebies, in a good way, i had to touch my back and shake myself to get rid of the feeling, maybe it was the fluid in my spine, but i loved it!

[OT]

I hope you don't really believe you can't write a poem!! this is great! strong rhyme scheme, and strong sense of humour, very randomly reminded me of BFG haha don't know where that came from! the pops and fizzles I think haha nice!!

[*]

I love this! I love the happiness of it and your choice of words! Your poem brought a smile to my face! Great piece! :)

[Jamie]

Haha this one was hilarious. Hope you'll write another one like it.

[MiidniightSoul]

Another amazing poem. Your style of poetry makes me laugh and smile, and I really enjoy them. I rarely read that style of poetry, for I prefer dark and sad poetry but yours are very amusing. Keep it up.

[Justin Littlefield]

You're like a more disturbed and not so childish version of Shel Silverstein lol

[Hush Hush]

Very well done ! it seems you aliens do have wonderful sense of poetry :D

[r]

Haha! That is an AMAZING poem, and I love it. It made me laugh, and I know how this feels. I LOVE the pop, spark, fizzle part, and I LOVE the ending; it's fantastical. I lovers it. Wonderful!! (: