Beneath the Sea, it was Too Late

Just a poem about the myths of old. A tale of mermaids no longer told.

A gentle song on the wind,

Draws me forth, making my head spin.

Following the mesmerizing melody trapped in a daze,

The salty air wraps me in its embrace.

There off the shore draped upon a jagged rock,

Lies a young maiden, much to my shock.

Vibrant hair dripping wet,

Creamy skin gleaming with sweat.

Shimmering eyes of ocean hue,

Honey sweet voice like morning dew.

Her song fades as I draw near,

A startled gasp I do hear.

She backs away, almost afraid,

"Thats a lovely tune, your serenade."

A gleam of green catches my eye,

Fish like scales on her thighs.

A startled gasp escapes my lips,

Part fish, she were, from toe to hip!

A musical key escapes her throat,

I raise my hands, trying not to provoke.

She lunges at me when I draw to close,

Around my shoulders her arms enclose.

Jagged teeth tear into my collar,

Startled I try to holler.

Not a sound did I make,

Beneath the sea, it was too late.

 

4/7/2014

Reviews

[Raj Sahu]

“Though I walk through the valley of death I will fear no evil, for I am the evilest m**********r in the valley” ― Alex Garland

Your poem is terrible. The depiction of mermaid is horrible. I like it.
Congratulations!

[Tessa]

Something about sirens gives me the creeps. Imagining something so powerful that it could lure you to your death terrifies me, keep writing this is amazing! Congratulations on getting third place in my contest. :)

[Malister Mikey]

What a wonderful piece of poetry, I love sirens/mermaids a lot so this poem is very good great job

[MAD ENGLISHMAN]

Really liked this poem. Telling a story in poetic verse isn't easy. Well done.

[Arrinae]

Thank you! Telling stories through poetry seems to be my thing. Its pretty fun to try and see what sort of story I can create with poetry. I'm very glad you enjoyed it.

[MAD ENGLISHMAN]

Thank you for entering my little contest.
Hope you will appreciate that I cannot comment now as this would be unfair to other entries.
I shall return after the contest is over.
Very best regards.
Clive.

[Arrinae]

Thank you very much! I really appreciate it.

[Jesse Hayworth]

Awesome. Can't say more, just awesome.

[Arrinae]

Thank you!

[icelandicblue]

She made enough sound for both with her siren's song. Mermaids have been sanitized by Disney but you have brought back the darkness that is embedded in the tale.

[Arrinae]

That was my intent! I'm glad you like.

[A. Amos]

Startled I try to holler.
Not a sound did I make,
Beneath the water, it was too late.

This is interesting and mesmerizing piece, above lines you nailed well my friend. simply beautiful

[Arrinae]

Thank you for your review! Its amazing what can be written with one theme in mind. ^_^

[A. Amos]

You're most welcome