Without Him

She picked up the pieces, 

Heartbroken and soul nearly shattered.

She looked so fragile,

With her mind so tattered,

Her sorrow filled eyes,

Grew cold as ice.

To ease her pain,

No one would suffice.

Without him in her life,

The pain will never fade.

Oh how she cursed them,

Their bloody 'Holy' Crusade.

To see her stand and fight,

So cold and efficient.

She'll end the war for him

Their forces so deficient.

If it costs her own life,

She wouldn't have a care.

Her enemies would still fall,

And suffer far more than despair.

Reviews

[Antoñyo]

This piece is sad but powerful in its wording. I can't help but like the flow and some lines jump out at you vividly, especially if you can relate: Her sorrow filled eyes, Grew cold as ice. To ease her pain, No one would suffice.

Thanks for the share

[Arrinae]

You're welcome and thank you!

[Dee]

Beautiful sad and heartfelt..The clear imagery, good flow and rhyme and your well chosen words made for great reading of this emotional story/poem. Bravo..touched deep this reader..Blessings...Dee

[Arrinae]

I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thank you Dee.

[Ashira Macy]

Great emotion in this. It flows from sorrow to numbness to anger, just as it would for someone naturally. She will avenge his death and she will make those responsible suffer as much as she has in the process.

[Arrinae]

I'm glad you like it, Ashira!

[raj24]

i liked the story..a lady fighting for herself and her lover..he is no more but she dont want to give up..it reminds of Rani Jhansi..she fought her battle till her last breath...beautiful poem with lots of emotions ..thanks for sharing :)

Raj

[Arrinae]

Thank you for reviewing. This was a scene that playing out in my dreams so often that I just had to put it in a form of writing. Poetry seems to have suited it best.

[raj24]

beautifully done.. i really enjoyed reading it :)

[Emily]

'She picked up the pieces' wow that part just sucked me right in! Well done.

[Arrinae]

I'm glad you liked it! ^_^ Thank you for the review!

[Bowers]

great write! very interesting, I loved the story, very dark but catching. !

[Arrinae]

Thank you very much for reading it and leaving a review. I am glad you liked it!

[Bowers]

:) your so welcome!

[KAin]

There's a gentleness to this poem that lies beneath the heartbreak, I think; it stands out in how her rage is born from what she's lost. Despair, anger pain... they're usually born from loss, and you've helped to convey that very nicely in this poem.
Nice work, Arrinae!

[Sami Khalil]

"To see her stand and fight,

So cold and efficient.

She'll end the war for him

Their forces so deficient.




If it costs her own life,

She wouldn't have a care."
A good read and write...:)

[Arrinae]

Thank you!

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure...:)

[Rita L. Sev]

Your poem has a gentle shape, a form that, intended or not, adds an interesting element. I get a strong "Joan of Arc" vibe from this piece. Tough but fragile woman, motivated by love perhaps gone awry... Nice!

[Arrinae]

Thank you, that is actually what I was going for.