IN SEARCH OF ...

Patience and Silence , are two powerful energies given by GOD.. Patience makes us mentally strong and silence makes us emotionally strong...

                                        IN SEARCH OF...

When i came back to home i saw he was not their.I searched for him everywhere,but he was not their.I cried , I  screamed , I shouted with cry "Where are you?" ... but their was no reply.I was feeling alone .I cried for whole dark snowy  night in the open sky, where stars were watching me .At that moment  I felt that sensation ,that warmth in my heart like someone was their to wipe my tears , but still their was something that was bothering me as if gusts of darkness were flowing through me .I remembered his lips ,his deep eyes ,those curls of his hair .But I still got that feeling as if part of him was still in me but apart from all this the truth was that he wasn't  their ,he'll never be...because he's long gone...he has moved in his life,he won't understand how much i miss him ,how his memories ,his voice keeps me awake the  whole night , how he used to make me laugh  at all his folly acts...OH! it makes me smile,but its too late  for him to come ...keeping all these memories apart I still was feeling that hand on my hand ...but slowly i felt my soul leaving me ,flaps of my eyes closing but i was happy,still happy because  their was someone , someone who cared for me ,someone who gave me the  feeling  that nobody else in this whole world gave me that day ...gradually my soul was out of my body,out of this condition into the bright,twinkling stars ,towards the search of love, happiness, silence, freedom because that was the night when i said to myself LET GO  ...and STOP SUFFERING....

Author's Note

hope you like my imaginary world...

Reviews

[Marianne Rose]

A touching piece of that lonely feeling when who we love is gone suddenly. There are some edits I have for you that might make it more readablè- just small spelling and punctuation comments. Most of the time when you use "their" it should be "there". "Their" is the word you use with people- like "their love for each other". "There" is more for places- like "He wasn't there". I was a little distracted by the commas too- no space before a comma like "I screamed," and no space before a period, but make sure there is one after a period. I think these edits will make it more readable. But I love the theme, and the feelings expressed, which we can relate to. Hope this helps.

[Arooj Purra]

Thanks a lot.I respect your points, and will look after them.Next time i will definitely keep these mistakes in my mind .Thanks a lot for helping me.I am glade that you liked it.

[Nwang]

you should have tried to write this in the form of a poem it would have been great. Anyways good writing I love your angsty stuff, your poem 'Fed Up' was good too.

[Arooj Purra]

Thanks friend .

[Coyote Poetry]

Hard journey led to wise ending.
"gradually my soul was out of my body,out of this condition into the bright,twinkling stars ,towards the search of love, happiness, silence, freedom because that was the night when i said to myself LET GO ...and STOP SUFFERING...."
I liked the above lines. I believe we must know pain to know pleasure. Thank you for sharing the excellent story.
Coyote

[Arooj Purra]

thanks my dear friend...

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

Sometimes you need to let go loved ones. I know its really hard but that's the way it should be...
Life is made to move on until, you search the true meaning of life!

[Arooj Purra]

absolutely right friend..i agree

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

Great! Just like your profile says - Life goes on...

[Arooj Purra]

hahah.. yes my dear

[Akashi]

Very beautifully written, I enjoyed it. :)

[Arooj Purra]

thanks a lot...

[Akashi]

You're welcome.

[Deepak Belbase]

isn't that we call illusion? I mean i really don't know how to respond. you've a really good description skill and your idea or your imagination is very creative and productive. But there is something that u need to explore more and have to add some vividness in this to make it more real, instead of writing, he make me laugh with his folly act or whatever you just try to explain a particular thing like "what thing of him make you more laugh". It's really a good piece of writing... keep it up

[Arooj Purra]

thanks a lot Deepak ...taking your suggestions will really help my writings to be more creative...

[Deepak Belbase]

ur welcome :-)