As you like it.. the word "if"

Page masters Challenge #11 inspired by as you like it, and the word "if" I can understand if you cant read this, I can hardly read it myself, so if its too much of a problem let me know and I�ll type it.

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Kind lords, ladies, loves of all, tempest parity linguists
ye whom feast hardy upon daubery prose, she to he to
her to the affectioned many ne'er pensive o'er bounteous
neywords set to song by word oneyer candle wasters,
ye standing rattling the clack-dish half full with stars
diminutive illume mercies enmesh'd in rushing nights
stream and grant a voice eloquence otherwise featureless.
For from our pens a blood-bolted weary toil utter we sit
fordone, most capricious poets erring unbarbed unbracen'd
we unlook to joy once found in askance, where once
nothing lay ahead but to kiss the air, its spring breath, gentil
the caress to our ears, tis a desert! As dry as marble tombs,
as suffering as the absent argument of what in spirit
cannot arrest or alas attest, but disguise well upon
the unfolding star that settles the flock, a silent hark to
bid the Sheppard's dream deep as deep as forgotten
in upon their glowing fires ever present in our core.
Warm the touch near and roughly rub away thine day
to moodgilded dust, sprinkle it measured affined
o're and toward emerald fields lingering dews, truths,
half truths and full lies, fallen dull sullen dead
millstones to weep, if only we were poets, such in heart as thee.

Reviews

[W.k.kortas]

One of the problems when someone attempts to write in the language or style of a bygone era is that very often the results sound forced or highly unnatural. There are no such failings here; the flow of the piece is natural, with the patterns of speech, and there is no clunkiness of syntax or meaning. Very impressive piece of work.

[Mark Pearce]

A difficult piece for the modern (short-attentioned) reader, but this piece has MAGIC to it.

[J]

I am completely stunned at your talent for this sort of beauteous writing ....... and believe me, it IS a talent! Never could I accomplish a masterpiece such as this. WELL done on a challenge that completely undid me!

[Gandré]

wow this was something else...
fantastic. Yes very impressive.
you see things in a landscape.

[Nan]

Such a beautiful eloquent escape we had in the words of poets. You've found a very
cool reflection of the past as you had channeled it into the present.

I think that there was a time when love needed all this blur around her to be
spoken so as not to defy a gentleman's ego. I love this and have to save it.
Every word is a feast even for candle wasters.

Nan

[SilentDream]

Beautifully written. I liked the added touch of posting the handwritten version as well...
Pen on :)

((Hugs and LOve)) ~SilentDream

[R J Askew]

Like 'candle wasters' and 'unbarbed' rings a bell for me. Like 'as dry as marble tombs' and 'the unfolding star that settles the flock'. Wasn't sure what it was about cos I am brick thick, so had another look and spotted 'daubery prose' arf, arf...there is far too much of that about. Also like 'if only we were poets' as I think that all the time of myself. I wondered if this might be a prologue.

[Wondering Mind]

This is amazing! A pleasure to read from start to the brilliant ending.
"o're and toward emerald fields lingering dews, truths,
half truths and full lies, fallen dull sullen dead
millstones to weep, if only we were poets, such in heart as thee."

[Emily B]

Lovely . . . as always. You do love this style of writing. And it shows.

[J.P. Bristow]

Congrats this is outstanding!!! This is exactly what I meant about going above and beyond.......this is an A+ performance I even love that you added your handwritten version......so authentic and WONDERFUL!!!!!!