Tone

doe ray me far sew la tea stone, flown, home, roam, loam... It�s nothing just a morbid muse. :)

 

 

              Solitary Earth,

                                  hold me

        Solitary, Uncovered, feeling Raw,

                 heal me

          burnished flesh

                     s-t-i-t-c-h-e-d and

     t#h#a#t#c#h#e#d 

   with pine needs

 

 

                 S

                       h

           u

                          f

     f

                         l

                                e    d       about

                       with feet

 

 

 

 

       alone,

 

 

   too feeble to catch the wind,

                               too thick to let the grass grow through;

                                   g

                               n

                           i 

                      s

 

                  through the

                  short

     sharp

                                     strings off high,

                       top

     in                 ^                 notes,

       mid tones

 

and       l

                i

                   n

                       g

                           e

                               r

                                  i

                                     n

    g         base

                             Soluble as any stone

                   I

  resting in the alkalinity of a body fed lemon d

                          r

                            o

                          p

                           s

       as staple diet,

                             offered from such sly hands of promise, fate

                                       and

                     promise.

                    

 

                                    skylarking voice... l   a  u    g   h,      ever so loud,        ever so proud

    Did you ever see so many petals floating?

    I  

   remember

   breathing                         in so deep

 

               the

                   whole                           space

 

                       and comfort                          it contained                  around and around,

              

 

               but I don’t remember exhaling.

Author's Note

Hrmmm stuff all over page, looks like ants.

Reviews

[Nan]

this one made me inhale and breathe deeply, as if the wish for a healing
and the pause that makes it happen is real

I enjoyed the anticipation and how it breeds our own calm

I think you've the captured the spirit of healing very aptly with a
"don't ask, just wait and connect" kind of feeling

I love how you do that, I get immersed in your words
and timing is of the essence in how you accomplish this

beautiful and inventive, thanks for sharing

Nan

[Emily B]

How is it I've never been here before? It's beautiful, wonderful, and adventure that I didn't quite imagine . . . I loved following the little overgrown path.

[Collect-Eye]

Wow..that ending punched me right in the balls.

I could see feel and hear all the imagery in this..the way you pulled and separated the lettering/wording was really cool.

it just has a natural, slow intense pacing to it..you are a powerful writer and, I can see very sensitive and graceful as well..good stuff..feel free to send me read requests when new stuff comes out..

peace
John

[zig]

you area liar! you told me you didnt know how to write with abstract spacing. liar liar liar! this s brilliant, very wellcontroled, expressive, vivid, alive. the effect of the spacing matches the content perfectly. sorry its taken me so long o comment

[Brittany DeFranco]

Omg I love the way you put your thoughts into this poem!! It's awsome and I wish I could come up with something like that!

Keep writing I will be reading more! ^-^
~Brittany

[The Dark Priest]

This was not only fun to read; but I see how the placing of each letter and word add to the power in your voice here. This says a lot without ever having to really say too much! Again, a great read!
Write hard!

[PianoandPage]

crazy! this had so much visual poetry that it almost made me sickened to read it.

i think you crept up right to the edge of reasonability on this one armada. lol.

unlike some who try this... each breaking of words into shapes and such works and makes sense.

the blessing and curse of this technique is that it makes us really engage our brains in new and creative ways.... but sometimes the poetic lines get lost in the novelty.

i think this had a lot of really amazing imagery but i'd have to reformat it and reread it to remember what it was even about.

catch 22.