Offspring

You are just the Woman who gave birth to me, no more, no less.

 

You think you know me,

But you just read the cover.

You think you understand,

  You just assume.

You don't know me,

That's the truth.

They say we look like sisters,

We're not even close.  

I want to be a stranger,

Mother.

You don't know me.

I wish you did.

You don't know me,

That's the truth.

You talk, I listen.

I talk, you turn, never listen.

You don't know me.

Leave it at that.

There was a beginning,

Not quite the end.

You don't know me,

Clearly you can not see,

I'm not you,

I'm your offspring.

Author's Note

Be Critical, no sugar on to. Not the best at english though i love it.

Reviews

[Annabelle-adonna]

Your english is fine, really! I like the poem and there is a lot of good stuff in it. Maybe you could structure it a bit differently or improve the flow a little. It doesn't really matter though, the message is still powerful and it is well written.

PS: Your picture is really cute! :)

[Nykie R]

thank you!, and yeah i realize that, thank you. hopefully my next ones should be better. when it comes with the structuring and flow. :)

[Shannen Forrester]

With no sugar coating, the flow is messed up, I'm unsure if there is meant to be a rhyming scheme and yet I still really like it. I find it relate-able and enjoyable to read :)

[Nykie R]

yeah i agree with the flow, but it has no rhyming scheme or i didn't intend to have a rhyming scheme. I'm glad you liked it. Thanks for your review :)