So Far Away

OK, I seriously don't know what came over me!!!

 

So far away

 

It took me so long-

Though not without reason,

To be here.

 

It took you ages,

Before you could see, really see,

What lies just beside you.

 

It took a lifetime,

Of dreads and denials,

For me to accept.

 

It took you decades,

To realize that home,

Is really where the heart is.

 

So far away we’ve been,

So little said between us

To understand.

 

So far away we've been,

From home, from the heart,

To return.

 

But here you are in all your glory,

And here I am, unbelievably,

Together.

 

And away goes the distance,

That was between us,

And there goes the so far away.

Reviews

[Mary Christabel George]

You did justice to the landing......:)

[Areeba]

Thanks!

[Mary Christabel George]

Welcome.......:)

[Daniel Malone]

This is a lovely piece. There's a lot of genuine truth. Even the most vast distances seem to be bridged with ease as long as love exists. Thank you for sharing!

[Areeba]

Thank you!!!

[Rose]

It's really good. :3 Keep it up.

[Areeba]

Thank you so much!!!

[Rose]

Welcomes. :3

[Nami Machae]

the flow here was really nice and the reading was enjoyable. I really like the phrasing here also. There really wasn't anything I could find that wrong with it :) It was a really good write and I hope to read more by you

[Areeba]

Thanks^^

[Jem Sagcal]

Amazing flow, with each stanza connecting to the other so gracefully. Great write.

[Areeba]

oh thank you, jem!!!

[Zap-the-awesome]

It's cool. You can feel it

[Areeba]

Thanks!

[Kitty Davies]

Critically, I would like you to revise this with corrected spelling (e.g. "Together" instead of Togather). Otherwise, I love the structure with the form, but I feel you could convey more.

[Areeba]

Thank you for correcting me, I wouldn't have noticed otherwise!!!

[Butterfly_Kid]

It's good. The pacing is nice, and each stanza has the same syllable flow. Technically, it is quiet good. On the artistic side, you definitely have the conveyance of emotion spot on, if not very literal. I love to see poetic devices in use to really captivate my imagination and feel along with you. It's clear what you are trying to say. I hope all the best for you and the one your poem is about.

[Areeba]

Thanks a lot!!!

[Areeba]

Thanks!

[Holly Mason]

but here you are in all your glory...beautiful image of some one waiting giving the other time to learn on their own
thank you for sharing

[Areeba]

Thanks^^