Death

This is a poem that I wrote for my English class. It's alright, I suppose, and I thought I should share it with you.

Never-ending pain

Drawing the life from a single soul

Strangling, cutting off life itself.

Struggling until buried in a hole.

Freezing a soul into a frigid, dark submission

Cold winds suffocate and choke

The struggle-- it soon ceases

The soul laying still under a lifeless cloak

Sleeping for eternity

The soul lies beneath

Silent cries--

Screaming to breathe.

Reviews

[Elvis Gilley]

It is a power filled piece. the imagery is great again and i can appreciate the subject. keep up the good work. loved it not as much as the last one about rain but it is good.

[ashesonfire]

Wow, very powerful! Definitely another dark poem that you can feel the emotion through it. I love the line "Freezing a soul into frigid, dark submission", something about this line speaks to me. Very good job!

[Jack Reaper]

this is really quite deep and dark. i feel a sense of loneliness and desperation. like the soul is still trying to live while the body is dead. its thought provoking. really great work.

[DeCipher]

I like it very much. Quite clever.