Newport

This is an old one I unearthed, it's about smoking my first cigarette when I was 15

I stood nervously next to you
Drowned in your scent
In the freezing November air
Behind work

You light one up
And joke about me
But I don't understand sarcasm
Affirmation, Confirmation
My fingers tremble at the exchange

You ignite it for me
"Inhale," you say
I cough, I sputter
I smile in pleasure

"It comes easier with time."
One hour later
It's time for another.
The coughing dies down
Sensation, perception
My weakness, my weapon

I was dying to try
Now I'm dying for trying

Reviews

[ATG]

This was a great poem about someone trying something not good for them for the first time. I got a sense of how it was like smoking your first cigarrette. The poem flowed very well and was well written.

[Dalebear]

wow what a great poem

Dalebear

[YouoweYoupay]

Awesomely written, I enjoyed every word!! A very unique summary of, well, eventual lung cancer, or worse s**t. Thank you so much for sharing. *thumbs up!!* Keep writing!

I was dying to try
Now I'm dying for trying

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[Daydreamer54]

Wow great poem and i especially like the last stanza. it's the truth about ciggareets and how u can get hooked. U described tht moment exactly. Great write! :)

[Mikki]

Overall very well done, but I really love the last two lines.:) (Looove Newports by the way! The way to go!)

[Brad]

used to be slave to this crap, then granddad got emphysema and died, then mom got emphysema, then i got lung cancer...thought it time to stop

[momo]

nice story i could see it all happening very good write!

[nighttimesnoozer]

ooooo boy!! smoking i dont like it but i liked the way you describe it

[Jonathan De Elvira]

Hurm, an amateur try on cigarette, I liked the flow and the wordings, this was catchy and felt good to read although the contain kinda sarcasm with me...
great..