J.R.

This poem is about a friends-with-benefits relationship between a guy and a girl.

I always knew what we had was just a phase
You're a guy and I'm a girl
Let's see where we can go with this

Every sin cast the line and sinker
In the back of your car
The woods in your backyard
The bathroom at the park

The difference between you and me
Is you're a w***e
And I'm a sucker for cheap lines
And hot guys
Like you

But you've got a girl now
And I'm in way too deep
And all alone

Now I just call your phone
I know you won't pick up
But I love to hear your voice
Telling me
To leave a message at the beep

I've got another boy to screw
But I close my eyes
And he becomes you...

Reviews

[Love-shadowed Silhouett..]

Whoa! Awesome poem... really, really awesome... Good job! Love the last line ;)
And I hope things turn out for you, I know the feeling. Haven't been in an identical situation so I can't say I've been there, but I understand the emotion behind it. Really great job :)

[LunalitSol]

Just wanted to say that I completely love this. ^^

[Elwina]

Very emotional piece, very powerful in the scene you describe. I can feel the walls close up on you as I progress through each line. Dark deep situation. Nicely done.

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This is sad and so well written

[KatiePie]

I admire the depth of the honesty in this. I wasn't expecting what came next, so each line took its own toll, it was full of surprises which kept me on the edge of my seat and eager for more. Great write, I loved reading it. :)
-Cathrine

[Jonathan De Elvira]

wow,
Luckily I never had this kind of relationship..
Very raw indeed...

[Marie Harrison]

I like the raw edgy feel of this write. Good stuff.

[Matthew Kult]

I love this, I like the bite to it. I like the fact you make light of multiplicity. It's exciting and very well executed.

Great work.

[momo]

oh my. this poem is very good indeed! the emotion is caught perfectly and it flowed perfectly well done!

[nightmask]

very nice twist i don't think i've ever read a poem like this with that kind of story in it very cool :]