Spiderweb

 

Through the half light

of a half life

Her will became ensnared 

Resistance heightened as she fought

Against the suffocating tethers

of invalidation.

A sickly venom of broken dreams and promises

swam swiftly through in her veins

And yet she sought no antidote

Yielding to demise.

 

As her struggle abated and dawn opened its arms.

She lay still

Waiting.

The world around her softening

Regrets tumbled like dusty photographs

through her weary mind.

Resigned to her fate

She remembered how she fell into this trap

Now nothing to do but let her yesterdays

devour her tomorrows... 

When suddenly she sprung sublime

Hazy and drenched

A will reborn!

And with eyes alight in vintage madness

Clawing at shadows

With frantic fingertips

Pared her humility into spiderthreads

Until she felt the sweet breath of mercy

caress her cheek

 

And as the last star faded into daylight

She was herself newly woven!

Reviews

[Chris W.]

Speaking of alliteration... lol. But seriously the way you used it in the third stanza was outstanding.I love how the tone of the first two sloped downward, then the last couple lines of the 2nd one dropped right off like it could have ended there, short and depressing. But then out of nowhere you crank it way up with the first line of the third stanza, a high energy line with perfect alliteration to really make it pop. Then its cranked way up until the last two lines where it drops right off again. Perfect interest curve, especially for the theme of the piece.

[Ivy]

Thanks for noticing my profuse use of alliterative allusion in this poem (ha!)... and for the great review. :)