Dialogue between man and water

A Q&A

A dialogue between a merchant sailor and water

Water: Do you think me beautiful?

Man: Very much. You are the most beautiful of land, sea, and sky. You dominate the world. Those that live in you are both colorful and lively.

Water: Do you find me fun and useful?

Man: I swim in you, surf your waves, and sail across your surface. I feed my family your fish and make my living traveling across you.

Water: Do you fear me?

Man: No! Why would I fear such a lovely creation as you. I love you.

Water: You are foolish!

Man: Why?

Water: Fear and respect me. You are weak. In me are fish that can eat you. My waves can level your cities. No storm ever created over land has wrought the destruction as my storms. My currents can pull you under and forever will you be mine. I have swallowed whole ships. My whirlpools have a tighter grip than anything on land. You are foolish and weak. Take this as your only warning. Be gone from me I have an ecosystem to maintain.

Reviews

[Samuel Dickens]

This composition is novel and clever, and I enjoyed it a lot. The water is right you know. Anyone who has spent time on the sea (I'm retired from the U.S. Navy) knows that it's power is awesome. Wrecking ecosystems is something man is pretty good at, so I hope water can endure--if not, we're all doomed.

[Esteban Morfín]

I liked the idea very much, not so much the execution. The transitions feel very abrupt. It is well written nonetheless, and I see a bright future for you. (Maybe you are already in that bright future, since this was written ten years ago.)

[Jason Galliger]

"I have an ecosystem to maintain" -sounds like it's gonna be heading to the gulf for awhile. great job

[Livana Lowell]

Omg, this is so cute! I laughed at the end! This is entertaining and meaningful, perhaps, there could've been more difference between the dialogue, but it's fine. The controlling idea expresses many points and concepts such as vanity and the deception of the beauty. While the waters give, they take. Wow, I've gained a new form of imagrey to be honest.

Also, you have a little typo, here:

"If" feed my family your fish and make my living traveling across you.

Did you mean "you" as in the waters feed the family?

Otherwise, I loved this and I truly think this deserves a hundred and a place in my libary.

[Carolina Kel]

That last line made me laugh a little, even if that is a sad thought about the ocean's ecosystem with the oil spill.
This is a fun little piece and very much the truth. There are two sides to everything and the ocean has its beauty and its wrath to be sure.