Death by Ego

Beneath all the unscrupulous whims of the world,
Death by ego lurks deep down in the dark quarry,
Futile efforts of rescue with every sweet word,
Serve but dessert to those that feign feeling sorry.

There lived a child with a silver spoon as they say,
Headstrong father spending fortunes in the belief,
That his greying streaks would glitter on that bright day,
The lad takes his reigns and lets him lie in relief.

The wealth that spurred the boy's growth taught him the hard way,
How borrowed pride gently picks clear conscience apart,
Between ruthless riches and voiceless grievance to weigh,
Honour was tested and lessons learnt in his rich heart.

A true purpose which transcends being mighty and high,
Through a worthy play awaiting curtains of glory,
In lieu of death by ego yielding pitiless sighs,
Separates a trifling tale from a solemn story.

Reviews

[Lorry]

Now either I am seeing a connection here that I have made up, which is allowed, because I am awesome, or I have missed the point entirely and see a correlation in your words to what I have been seeing, albeit less prosaic like a and stuff, for years...
... and that is, that if all the millennial are right and we are all as special as they delude themsel elves to be, then doesn't that just make everyone plain, ordinary and average?
Now I know what you're thinking, "well that's a bit rich coming from someone who proclaimed earlier that he is awesome, but that was said in a futile attempt at humour and I've met a lot of these" snowflakes", which in calling them "snowflakes" might get me oh shock horror, cancelled, whatever that means, but I just don't find many of them amusing at all, or even with a sense of humour at all, so maybe calling them delusionists wouldn't hurt their self deluding ego as much.... but if there was ever going to be a perfect name for them, then snowflakes would win that competition by a distance indeed. 😊
Now, you can take my opinion as seriously or frivolously as you like, but remember, I am way too old to be a snowflake, so I must be awesome! 😊

[Archishman Rick]

I would love to give you an award, medal or whatever awesome this material world could offer for telling me all this. I honestly couldn't have expressed any of what you did as well myself, which you did in your own, wittily awesome way. So the way I see it, you are definitely awesome..
Now, I feel there is certainly something off about a lot of these so called millennials, many of their ideals are far from amusing, and are ostentatiously self righteous. Snowflakes indeed, their thin brittle ego could shatter as easily as their values.. To prevent that from happening, these fools came up with "cancelling" those with differing beliefs. Laughable. These are just the negatives about them though, which make the area of our discussion in these comments.
So, about your opinion, I don't really need to take it, as I seem to have it myself. 😅
Being born in 1998, I can't say if I'm a millennial, but labels don't ultimately matter I suppose.

I personally enjoyed how you correlated this poem with all that you said in the review. Interesting how words can trigger in different ways.
Awesome regards!

[Lorry]

I'm not totally anti millennial though. In fact, one of my favourites words came about from the millennial and it even became the word of the year during lockdown. I'll give you the definition before I give the word, because it always makes me smile...
Definition... When you open a packet of biscuits to take one and end up finishing the whole pack.
The word... Snaccident!
It's just genius, because we've all done it and it makes perfect sense 😊

[Archishman Rick]

Apologies for the delay, I had been occupied with a week long regime of activities for spirit and bonding. I agree there, the millenial comes with its perks and is a bearer of transition between generations. The word snaccident caught me off guard, hahaha. Amazing.

[Marie]

A superbly inked poem on the evils of Ego which is the driving force of so many human beings. The father in the poem I feel was a man of pride as well as Ego, but I feel that the sun was of a humble nature, having seen and learned from his father and had noble causes in mind and I feel that is what separated the son from his father. The son earned his riches the hard way, but he was noble, honest and direct. It is always advisable to slay Ego, its falseness, its pride, its excessive sense of self importance do nothing to enhance a human life. A wonderful poem with a moral for the reader. I like this poem very much and a very grateful Thank You! for sharing it...

[Archishman Rick]

I am truly grateful and honoured to receive such a sincere review from you, good friend. I'm glad you acknowledge its worth.

[Marie]

Most welcome always, Rick... Thank you again for sharing...

[John the Baptist]

Many a fortune was amassed by ego driven individuals.It appears the boy's father was one of these. It appears the boy learned from his father's mistakes, and will avoid letting his ego direct him. Thus will he avoid a life driven by ego.

[Archishman Rick]

Thank you greatly for the commentary on this poem. It does indeed seem in the poem's context that the boy has learnt from past forebears and the like's misdeeds and unfortunately turned out cases. His open mindedness and willingness to self-reflect, has given him a edge for the better.

[Ken Simm.]

This to me evokes the days of the Raj and Kipling. I may be way off but I can feel the unearned privilage and discrepancies that exist, one would assume even yet. Whatever it is a superb write.

[Archishman Rick]

Thank you so very much for the accolade. You aren't way off, and I love how you are evoked of the days of the Raj and Kipling, this piece certainly may hint at or remind of certain times in history. Also, one that lets his sense of pride and ego overcome him, particularly one who has only recently embarked on his journey through life, starts to see those around as stress causing adversaries, becomes too self conscious, which sabotages his own productivity and ability. If he hasn't lived up to his own inflated sense of ego, he goes on to die miserably and pitilessly.. Unless he managed to know better.

[Neville]

there is so much contained herein and I like every little bit of it .. it seems he survived both the train crash and the bullet that followed so henceforth, shall be known as super ego 🐧

[Archishman Rick]

Oh yes, both those gruesome incidents are particularly hard to survive, so that says something doesn't it... :) Thank you sincerely for such a witty review. Super ego with a fluffy penguin to cuddle with, might as well help him sleep at night. 😅
My best regards.