Ritual

The traditionally wise,
I respect your enterprise,
Involving stern ritual,
With faith that speaks mutual.

But how is your holy fight,
In cryptic depths of the night,
When there is silent uprise,
Where strugglers ponder demise.

Values upheld to be true,
Wager how fortunes ensue,
Who thought the arms of just law,
Would safekeep each hiding flaw.

Show them what they wish to see,
With freedom of ecstasy,
So every bite on thick dust,
Can feed their hunger for trust.

With great events taking place,
We carry our master race,
But show me sweet ritual,
Where there is faith mutual.

Reviews

[Chris Shaw]

A thought provoking write. As I have got older I have sort of turned my back on organised religion. I can't help feeling that religion causes too many problems. So much hatred as a result of it. One man's festival is another man's bonfire. I think you can be a good person without having a set faith. Just treat All people as you would wish to be treated yourself. That is my philosophy of life. Respect and tolerance in far more abundance.

Chris

[Archishman Rick]

Thank you dearly for the review, Ms. Anne. I laud that open and kind philosophy that you have and speak of. I stand by it. Have a great one, and cheers ✌

[Miss Marlette]

I see your point totally and let no old racist f**k bossing around here tell you otherwise. A fight gets holy when you fight the bully whoever it may be. The lackeys and cronies will dub you bad but believe me you are proved correct as you go. Ritual with faith mutual? Always aspired. Freedom of expression and enterprise? All are entitled to it and not just some. Your poem is well outlined.

[Archishman Rick]

Greatly appreciate your comments in the review, Miss Marlette. Gotta keep fighting the 'holy' fight. :D Have a great one, Cheers.

[Miss Marlette]

Cheers dear 😄

[MarthaKlokke]

The concept of faith and ritual doesnt really mingle with mutual. Reason: man is evolved to dispute.Your effort to bring both together is good work.

[Archishman Rick]

Yes indeed. Ritual itself was developed to consciously inculcate a sense of order over dispute, among humans. But not for long though, haha.. Thanks a lot for the review. Have a great one, Cheers.

[Umar Aziz]

Nice poem Archishman Rick. You make a point here brother. Keep up.

[Archishman Rick]

Thanks a lot for the review, man! Thanks for stopping by. Have a great one :)
Cheers.

[Umar Aziz]

Welcome you. We have passed the decree in your favor.

[barleygirl]

I love that your poem is fresh & full of interesting ideas to ponder, but I'm not sure what point you might be making. This message might honor religious ritual or it could be a spoof against ritualistic rigidity. Either way, it's high achievement to write a poem so that those with opposing views can all see their point in your message. With religion & politics being so contentious to write about, this is the best way to approach it without getting people riled! *wink! wink!* Fondly, Margie

[Archishman Rick]

Haha.. I'm sure gladly hopeful that the ideas displayed can serve to be pondered for anyone regardless of their views and beliefs on subject. You make a sound discernment there, Ms. Barley Margie. For the subject matter, this piece marks respect, satire and both together. There's the appreciation for the age old and standing efforts of mankind to enforce order and stability through ritual/religion/politics, then there's the worry that despite all the experienced rituals that influence humans at some point in the name of health and holiness, they mostly being a generalized catering cannot address the complicated and specific aspects of mental health and silent sufferings, and neither can evoke a mutual, wide sense of loving faith. Yes, it may not be a responsibility of the subject matter of this poem alone to inculcate that kind of faith or love, there are other factors that can aid there, but it plays its part nonetheless. I'm sure you get the idea. Appreciate your review and thoughts. Thanks and cheers. Oh, and no "HUGS" this time? XD

[barleygirl]

Thank you for explaining further! Much deeper & more complex than I had ever imagined!