Im hooked on her...

This is my continuation of Why Does She do This to Me. This is about my best friend and our relationship

Your drug may be pot or crack mine is her...

Every time im mad at her or pissed I tell my self dont text her back Ethan swear to it and I to. 

When I get the text message I remind myself I swore to it, but it doesn't matter I know im going to text her back and act like nothings wrong. Sadly I love her to death as a friend that is, so after a couple minutes "im all better" and laughing, saying I love her. In the back of my head im saying danm her how come this always happens to me. Oh how I love her so but hate her, its funny my love for her is just like the song I Hate Everything About You- Three Days Grace. She'll call me saying hi with her beautiful voice (yes very cheesy lol) filling me with pain and happiness. Laughing at all my jokes saying she loves me a little to much then says wait for you its the perfect about. D****t goes through my mind every time I hear her say this and respond oh you knows it, but thats normal to love me a little to bit, then she'll laugh and say I love you.  I do this every time just to get to make her laugh and if were together Ill get a laugh and a hug, Im laughing as I type this cause its to true. Every time we were with friends they would say we should go out or were perfect for each other, d****t I think they always say that and I know they tell her later on that she should ask me out, but she laughs and says no I love Ethan but only as a brother and as a best friend. B***h I think... Couple days ago she told me she was going out with someone. I should be happy right? Wrong she knows she shouldn't for good reasons that I wont talk about right now... She asks if I was pissed at her cause she knew I didn't like that, but me loving her I said " haha of course not" I thought of course Im pissed you just did a hoe move Gabby Im completely pissed off at you. You know better than that wtf?!?, but of course I couldn't and now she'll go out with him for a month or two before something overly dramatic happens like; he cheats on her or something isn't working out. The only good thing about this is like how I said in this first part that shes still mine she'll never completely be his.

Reviews

[Archaos Broductions]

Thank you again for your review and yes the to your talking about was ment to be do

[Erin]

...Okay...I'm gonna hit you with grammar, because that's the only way you'll get better...but I'm gonna actually review it first...
This is really good. It has a bit of imagry in sense, although it isn't really the whole portrayal of imagry that most people think of (like...mountains or scenery and stuff like that)...what I mean to say is that I got this mental image in my mind about what you were talking about and who you were talking to. I really like how you began it and I like how it's in a different font than the rest of the piece...you're getting better at capitilizing your "I"s, and it really does make it a whole lot better. I really liked this piece...library!
So...grammar...
"Every time im mad at her or pissed I tell my self dont text her back Ethan swear to it and I to." Did you mean to say "too" for the last "to"? Or maybe "do"? I don't know, it seems out of place, in a sense.
I also think you should split it up into like two or three different paragraphs. That's because I think that it would have a different, better flow than what it does right now.I don't really know where to split it up, but I think that it would help a lot if you did.
Great job on the piece...I enjoyed it a lot. Now I have onw more piece to read from you, and then I'm done reading all of them. You should write more, so that I have more to read from you!
PBP