Perspective

Let's see who gets this poem

-------------------Perspective------------------

 

Shall I break your wings so you can no longer fly?

SNAP!

RIP!

CRUNCH!

RAKE!

 

Help me! Help me!

Honestly I'm impressed you can still utter a sound.

 

It's disturbing how pleasing that is

 

Sad? 

Perhaps.

But I'd accepted my shortcomings long ago.

 

Hmmm.

 

Ah yes!

 

Rewind.

 

Or perhaps cast you aside like a used toy?

Forgotten.

Abandoned.

Decaying.

Rotting.

 

Gone. Dead. Ash and Dust like everything before.

 

Oh! Better yet --

No.

But perhaps --

Alas that is no good either

 

Maybe I'll toss you in a cage.

Lock you inside.

Listen to you scream as darkness overwhelms you

Hear the sweet sweet laughs as insanity crawls up and out of your throat

Watch as you slowly lose everything you held dear

 

Life? What is life?

Death? What is death?

Family? Love? Identity?

 

Meaningless. Tee-hee

Pointless. Ho-Ho

 

Oh. This is disappointing!

Darn! You're no fun!

You caught onto the game so soon~

 

What is up is down and down is up

What is sane is not and insanity is sane

What is space?

What is time?

What is enslavement but a condition of the mind?

 

I see you've reached completion

I see you've found your answers

 

Tee-hee

Oh-ho

 

Perspective!

Perspective!

 

Mirror Mirror on the wall

Tell me who has made the fall

 

You

 

We

 

Me

 

Flutter Flutter I (You/We/Me) Are

 

Free.

 

Perspective.

Author's Note

Sooo curious to know your takes on this. It's kinda quirky and I'm not really sure if anyone will get the message

Reviews

[Lehlohonolo Lichaba]

i like the rhythm it is sort of like a song or a play kids would like to sing and play to , except the first part of cos hahaha. awesome write dude

[Tsukin Archangel]

Thanks man! And yeaaaah it's got a bit of a bouncey feel to it it flows but it's not really child appropriate lol

[Wolfwind]

I really like the tempo and beat of the ink. It has some wonderful word schemes that make it flow really well. I think what is really attractive about the work is that the flow is smooth, while incorporating a diverse flow of imagery and emotional sequences.
The overall visual I got from this was as if a black hole opened up inside a bird cage and I see the bird seeing it's own altered image and reverse image as if it's connected with an alternate universe.

Really wonderfully created! Very much enjoyed reading the piece.
Aaron - Wolfwind

Oh...btw... I thought the video you've got on your profile is really awesome!

[Tsukin Archangel]

THANK YOU!! I'm glad you enjoyed it! It really was a fun peice to write, letting out that somewhat contained psychopathy and shattering it, re-arranging it and reflecting it to back over and over. And yeah that's definitely a perfectly fine intrepatation of this peice. In the end they are one in the same two halves of one whole that repeat on and on forever and ever. THANKS FOR THE REVIEW and THANKS! Goodness that's like a year old I should update it with something more recent. VOIIICE ACTTINNG TIMMME~~~!!!

[Gracie G]

This poem is extremely interesting. I love the randomness in the structure. This is a really deep poem, and I really enjoy it. I like darker stuff more, so this is right up my alley! Awesome job.

[Tsukin Archangel]

THANKS!! Yeah. I was kinda going for like this structured disjointed thing so I'm really glad you enjoyed it! It was spawned from the prompt "bird cage" LOL somehow I came up with this.

[Coyote Poetry]

The poem is very good. I had to read twice.
"Life? What is life?
Death? What is death?
Family? Love? Identity?"
I like the set-up and how you used the language. I like the energy and the attitude of the poem. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Tsukin Archangel]

Thanks! Yeah. This was a fun, but kinda odd poem to write. It was kinda hard to get the right balance of nervous, psychotic energy and structure to make this flow. I'M GLAD YOU LIKED IT!

[Bri]

I love this! it's so creepy and you turn the tables quite a few times and that's what makes this so great. It really gave e the chills and I loved reading it. I look forward to more writing like this coming from you. keep it up!

[Tsukin Archangel]

THANKS!! Glad it gave you chills, that was definitely one of the purposes behind this piece! And yeah! I'm sure you'll see plenty more of this from me lol. I realize i tend to write a kinda psychotic poem once a yearish lol. Last year was Broken Glass I think. Ah! And btw I'll hopefully be posting the first chapter of that story I was ranting about today!

[Bri]

Great! I'll be sure to take a look @ it!

[Tsukin Archangel]

Errr Warning in advance. I'm still debating on this, buttt the introduction to Marc MAY be a tad on the graphic side soooo yeah

[Bri]

lol okay. Seems legit.

[Tsukin Archangel]

Ah after writing it i realize it's not a bad as I thought it would be lol

[Bri]

lol okay cool, I wasn't really sure wut to think anyway lol.

[Tsukin Archangel]

lol well ORIGINALLY it was gonna be a semi-graphic kinda intimate scene, but i figured out how to work it so that i dont have to actually write the sex but I still get the same emotions that I wanted to get across for him to come across. its like... Pg-15.5 lol

[Bri]

lol wow ok

[Tsukin Archangel]

its pretty much heavy make-out now with implied sex and some implied nudity

[Bri]

Ok, hmm, seems legit.

[Tsukin Archangel]

lol yeaahhhhhh i like the dark gritty side

[Bri]

LOL, many people do my friend, you are not alone.

[Tsukin Archangel]

i feel aliivvveeeee >:p well whenever u get a chance to check it out hope u like lol spent like a week coming up with the physics of that would lol

[JustAnotherPanic!]

honestly, i really like this poem even though i dont understand it, but i like it cuz i feel like u put a lot of emotions in it. its really good :)

[Tsukin Archangel]

Lol thanks. Yeah, it's VERY... seemingly disjointed and random, but its not lol. It's from the point of view of someone insane (obviously) and about how the game of judgement (life and death) is no fun when the captive figures out the game. That the cage is all a matter of perspective. AKA when the captive loses their mind and becomes the torturer instead, thus perpetuating the cycle of destruction.

[JustAnotherPanic!]

oh lol... i wouldnt have never guessed that xD im very slow.. lol, but i still liked it. keep writing! :3

[Tsukin Archangel]

LOl it's all good I'm not really surprised, I don't really expect many to get that meaning, but I kinda just wanna know what meaning people ARE getting from it