Martelle

A short story about a man's first night at his new apartment. What awful thing will make him regret his decision? (Originally for the Helena Blue Cafe Prompt Challenge but too long ^^:)

Fredric Martelle was a quiet man. 

At least that’s was what anyone who knew him would say. A small glorious pleasure that only the high profile elite, or the honored few he deemed worthy enough to be considered his friends, knew. A well guarded secret. One that was to be treated with the utmost respect and reverence. One that to even be considered to be included in was a gift from the Almighty. From God.

Though, if one were to ask that poor sap who sat next to him in chemistry, or the star jock on the football team, they could probably tell you too…

Guess it’s not much of a secret after all…

Anyway, Fredric Martelle was a quiet man. He liked to keep to himself. He liked to have his space. He liked his books, his ink, his crinkled papers and feathered pens. He liked the scent of worn pages, the aroma of freshly baked cookies following him to whatever room he chose, and most of all he liked the ocean. So you can imagine his joy at finding a seaside apartment for the killer price of only $300 a month. An absolute steal. A sham. A miracle. 

Definitely not too good to be true, right? 

Definitely not something to call into question, right?

Definitely not something to lose sleep over, right?

Ha. Sure.

That’s what he believed until the wailing silhouette decided to show up and wake him up at two in the morning.

Wait…

A Person?

Martelle rubbed his eyes.

Whoa…no

A Ghost?

Da f**k?

Author's Note

Lol sooo whatcha think? It's meant to be humorous lol and sarcastic but yeah enjoyable~ Maybe i'll like do a 2nd part for the next prompt when the word counts longer lol ANYWAY I MUST MAKE A 100 WORD ONE!!....or edit this one down....nah

Reviews

[Helen Crutchett]

Well it was good up to the last line.....Da @#%%# !!! Not sure how this completed the write and if it necessary. Call me old fashioned, but I don't like THAT word in any writing. I don't think it added anything to what was a great little story.

Yes, I know that "word" is bandied around a lot these days and at the risk of me being seen as an old 'fuddy duddy' I stand my ground on that one.


Helena

[Writer #00]

I agree. It did seem a bit random, but I suppose he wanted to portray a reasonable? reaction to viewing a howling phantom at two in the morning. If there was more characterization to Martelle, then maybe we would understand his reaction with more clarity. As far as I had assumed, Martelle was a shy, antiquated person who wouldn't use the profane. Then again, he may have purposefully contrasted the response to the character he'd set up through the rest of the story.

[Writer #00]

Great use of language (paragraph 5). I feel like this character definitely exists somewhere out of the plane of your imagination now.

[Tsukin Archangel]

lol thanks