You Ask Me Why?

ok soo this is for a very special someone~ Who will probably find this corny...which it is buuuut yeah hope you like it anyway dear~

You may ask why I love you

Is it your god like beauty?

Or your entangling charms?

Could it be your personality?

So strong and bright

Yet Never deterred 

You may ask why I care for thee

Is it really out of love?

Or is it pity?

An emotion disguised as another

Rest assured

My feelings remain true

To tell you that I love you

Would take more than time would allow

Our luck we have forever

For I must name all your features

All your blemishes

All your quirks and fears

You ask me if I love you?

You ask me if I care?

I do

And forever shall

Until the stars blink out

And we are again engulfed 

In the nothingness of our creation

Author's Note

happy 1st~

Reviews

[~loud whispers~]

Loved how you listed her traits it was a great read!

[Tsukin Archangel]

thanks

[~loud whispers~]

You are very welcome.

[Tsukin Archangel]

:3 Oh if u ever get a chance u ototally read my book Dare :3

[The dark story]

wow.you have penned y0our feelings so well .you have written it very elegantly.......i liked the last stanza a lot.it just awesome and heart touching.......great work!!!!!!

[Tsukin Archangel]

thanks :3 I'm glad u liked it :3

[kublakhan27]

Even though it's a commemoration of "the 1st" it has the feel of something written fresh off of that moment when you first realize you're in love with someone...now THAT is corny lol...your poem is sweet and I doubt there are many people out there that wouldn't want something like this written for them^^

[Tsukin Archangel]

LOL well i just wanted to put my feelings to paper and soo yeah thats how it came out yeah..i know im a corny helpless romantic apparently lol

[kublakhan27]

Haha well if you are, don't worry, you're not alone on that front :P

[Tsukin Archangel]

Lol gthanks 4 the info

[kublakhan27]

No problem lol

[Katherine Enma Pineappl..]

How sweet

Ahahaha damn I'm really a sucker for these

Damn it all!

Don't worry, girls love corny. Some don't however but you can really see the love in how this is written. Nice choice of words and again nice. Congratulations by the way~

Keep writing :)

[Tsukin Archangel]

thanks lol

[TC Dunn]

so beautiful. Very well done... I can feel the love in this just from reading it. It seems like it really came from your heart. Great job.

[Tsukin Archangel]

thanks ;3 I'm glad u felt it ;3

[Summer D.]

I'm disappointed and here I was thinking it was for me. What a horrible way to start my morning.

It wasn't bad- I don't think it's appropriate for me to critique since it was written with such honesty. The phrasing is a bit amateur though, but I suppose the honesty is all that matters.

Not bad.

[Tsukin Archangel]

lol yeah well love poems at my expertise :/ thanks :3

[Patricia B. Hepler]

'...I do
And forever shall
Until the stars blink out
And we are again engulfed
In the nothingness of our creation'

Your sincere bouquet of loving phrases surely will touch the heart of the one you love. Peace ~ pat

[Tsukin Archangel]

thanks :3 IT HAS so i'm happy cause like...i dont like seeming corny for no reason lol

[Rhianne Ney]

Corny but sweet... at least it describes the type of guy you are... (;

[Tsukin Archangel]

ehehehehehe yeah....i'm not really the love poem type.... i tried lol ^^;

[Rhianne Ney]

yeah, me too... mine sounds immature... but I do understand some of love

[Tsukin Archangel]

lol yeah i think most do but just cant exactly place those feelings in words...its much more difficult than writing about anger, or sadness, or *cough* psychopathy lol

[Rhianne Ney]

uh... I can write more on my pessimistic views and some observants

[Rhianne Ney]

I mean some thing I observe

[Tsukin Archangel]

yeah negativity is easier than positives idk y mayb ur slightly less connected to that emotion? Or maybe you're more connected...hmmm....the wonder of it all~

[Rhianne Ney]

I'm connected to both maybe two personalities in one...

[Coyote Poetry]

A beautiful poem. I like the flow of thoughts and description. To describe real love is very hard. Come from the heart. I like the way you described the desires and the qualities of someone. Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Tsukin Archangel]

thanks :3 I tried

[∠( ᐛ 」..]

I enjoyed and loved this poem ^_^
Remarkable work!
100/100

[Tsukin Archangel]

thank :3

[∠( ᐛ 」∠)＿]

My pleasure ^_^