LONELINESS............................

when you are in pain even your tears leave u.... how can you expect others to be with you?????????????

As time flies away,

My cold heart throbs.

A deep sensation of numbness prevails,

Which took away all the warmth of your love…

Leaving me cold, numb and deprived of every feeling……

While i was still lost in my thoughts,
a tear slowly rolled down my cheeks.
I asked it,"why?????????"
it said because you wanted to cry.

I hurriedly wiped it out,
else this cruel world will think i am freaked out.....

Tears are a sign of weakness,
so i thought concealing it,would be the best way.....
I don't want this world to tease me,
that is why i was moving quite swiftly........

While i was still lost in my thoughts,
another tear rolled down....
I said,"No, please ...... not now...."
it said,"Sorry!!! I have to... because with so much of pain even i can't be with you".....

 

Reviews

[*~Kristy~*]

I really liked this. Few people could pull of having a conversation with an inanimate object and make it personal as well as beautiful.
People do usually think that tears are a sign of weakness, but sometimes, the reason that we are so sad and we want to cry is because we haven't cried out whatever reason it is that we are sad. If this poem were true, and personal, I'd say just let it all out. It will really help...
Overall, I really liked the poem! Good job!

[rohit sapra]

I really liked these verses and I would like to say that tears are not always sign of weakness. Even boys do cry and all of are just humans. So, even the strongest of person can have weak moments.

[Lost_Love]

i can very well connect to it. loneliness leaves your heart cold and numb. everything seems stupid. life ceases to have any meaning. everybody leaves you when you need them most. look at the irony even your tears are no more yours.

[Khaaki]

beautiful poem... its difficult to pen down such conversations but it comes so easily to you...

[Jujubee_:]]

Wow. This was beautiful.You've written this wonderfully. Great write!

[heart_breaker]

beautiful poem!!! you are right.. people are such.. they leave you when you need them.....

[Blackcat]

wow!!! conversation with tears.... wonderful poem!! This one is really touching.....

[Mystic]

I fully agree with all the reviewers... it's not easy to write a poem on conversation with an inanimate objects... well done ;)

[sweet angel]

you are right when you are in trouble everyone leaves you alone in pain....

[Dead_End]

wow!! so you can even talk to tears..... U r full of brilliant ideas... such a wonderful concept...

[cartera]

You're too young to be feeling such pain. That was my first thought, but actually when young I suppose one does feel quite intensely. It's probably only when older that worldly-wise cynicism kicks in, so that pain is suppressed more.
As a poem it works well, although I do feel just a little tightening of the dialogue between tear(s) and person could make it even better.
Well done.
ATB
Alex.