Turmoil

           turmoil

     shattered dreams

  love,hatred,confusion

fighting,losing,lost cause

            jinxed

Author's Note

trying my hand at writing a cinquain..inspired by the group-'I Challenge You' :)

Reviews

[trainwreck]

This was pretty good. I liked it.

[Tommy]

I enjoyed this! I love the feel that can be put into the smaller sized forms of poetry, when done well they can emit so much emotion… I felt this…

Great Write!
RLG,
Tommy

[Valentine]

Good one..Kathie

[Jazique]

Nice short simple and exsitence of turmoil that keeps us moving hidden inside our body, mind, and soul. Well nice to know creativity is living on for you can say much with only so little.

[Alexis]

I haven tried to write a cinquain in a long time. I actually forgot how to! Oops. Anyways, for as short as the poem is, it still was very good! The shortness adds more emphasis to the words and I liked that quality of the poem. Great job!

[Judy Ponceby]

Well done, you captured this well.

[C. Rose]

Good job with the form, I like cinquain left justified, but that is really an utterly useless commentary, its good either way ;) Its dark, fitting turmoil, much enjoyed ~ Rose

[Siddhartha]

Oh, Murphy's Laws apply everywhere my friend. you have done a beautiful job here. this brims with frustration and the pain of just not being there. how good is good enough? This is a wonderful piece.

[M.Babu]

nicely structured to fit the title my friend!

Very brief and brave:)--->don't think i'll try my hand at a cinquain for a while!